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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: There is a naughty word in this poem. 2nd stanza, last line. Starts with a [edited by moderator] ends with [edited by moderator]. hehe I don't know if they will filter it, but if they do......remember.....Starts with [edited by moderator]..ends with [edited by moderator].....*smirks* Trick Line: Where's my crock pot? Lost within insidious dreams. A philantropist of the blah's. My colorful hell of happiness. Flying over clouds nightly. Eyes clawed out by hate. Women wage war on all mankind. The feinds, the [edited by moderator]. Diseased vermin play with my food. Consumed by hypocritical index fingers. We're the chosen ones to live, Yet closer than we think to die.  < !signature--> "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 10-26-2000).] |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
r u getting angry and women?.....lol good poem though very good |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
wow i sense anger hehe. good poem just don't be so violent!  Curlz "i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky" enrique iglesias |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow....Dopey....wow. Um...I don't know what to say. It's good...but I get the feeling your just a little*cough cough* angry at certain people...? When did you write this(I know I ask all the time)? Hasta luego Bel |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
As you know profanity is not allowed in the guidelines. Even disguised with symbols. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Whats going on Dopey??? Were you in a bad mood when you wrote this??? ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Dopey, I like this much!!! Ya know I love you man!!! And I respect your artistic side, and all, but what's this about??? Sometimes the world needs to just walk around screaming "I don't give a ****!!!" and be like my man Eminem, and all!!! Well, just remember, I love yoou!!! Allysa (too many happy pills)Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hehehe well they edited my word......oh well! I posted it up totally understanding the profanity deal.......but i so love profanity when I am mad.....which in this poem......yea i was mad. Well i was mad due to the fact that i got dumped. Women........i wasn't pissed off at all women but i put it in a general way so i wouldn't have to specify on WHO did WHAT to me. I don't know......anyway.....it's not really only about women but i dont feel like interpreting it unless im asked like i was on "Tub Of Meaning".......anyway....im glad you all enjoyed this..uh....hateful poem. i hope to post up more! hahaha "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I felt hate in thios, but it is an emotion that does have to be expressed, and you did that well. In a sweet innocent kid's voce: "Don't you know cussing is wrong?" Anyway, good job on this. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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