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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I want to be happy again, I thought i could change. It seems when i'm with you, My life gets re-arranged. You make me happy, In ways i thought i could never be again. I could always rely on you, Your truely an amazing friend. But although i had my doubts, I kept my feelings strong. That you could do the trick, But it turns out i was wrong. I thought you could fix me, I thought you were my cure. This picture that use to be so clear in my head, Now has become nothing but a blur. I wish i could say that you've helped me, But looking at where i am. I cant be helped anymore, All i need is a friend. I wish you could pick up my pieces, When i crumble to the ground. I think of how selfish i am, When i listen to how that sounds. I know you did the best you could, This is a hard thing to fight. But through it all, You being by my side wasnt anything but right. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. This was relly great, I loved it..the ending was great. well stay cool and happy writing... ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wel this was nice and the thought and message was great. I hope things work out.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I totally understand what you mean... when you put so much faith in one person to help you out and be your crutch, and then you realize that that wasn't their job.  We expect a little too much sometimes. Jenn- Ps. I'm glad the ending was happy. "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This was a really good poem. It expresses your feelings well, nicely done. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"I think of how selfish i am, When i listen to how that sounds." It isn't selfish at all. We all just need someone to help us go thru hard times. There is nothing wrong with that. greatwrite and keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow it's amazing. Yep, I like it. But really it's great...nice expression. Good job, good luck, smile, keep your head up Bel |
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