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Living a Lie |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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this is a kinda old one. this girl isn't alone anymore..yay.. She is surrounded She's all alone Her grins are reigning Her sadness has grown She is walking, steady... She flys away She is alive She died yesterday Her skin is pale Her skin is blue She is dancing Her feet are frozen, it's true That her grin's still reigning And her tears still flow She's still surrounded She's still alone. |
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Suteki New Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 5 |
Pretty words...go well together and it kind of rhymes. ^_^ I like it. ~S. |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
well many people may have figured out that i dont reply to poems just to say "good job" nor "keep it up" when i reply i mean it. this poem was awesome. i completely loved it. excellent Child of the Stars... just excellent San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well if San replies to a poem, it means it is good. And i'll have to agree with him on this one. Great job cutie pie!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
kinda creepy, but nice style here  jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Most people go through hard times in their life when they feel alone, this poem puts those feelings into words well. That's my opinion I think the begginning does a great job of setting up the feeling of the rest of the poem."She is surrounded She's all alone" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow i really liked this one. It had a lot of meaning but im glad that this gurl is no longer alone anymore. I really enjoyed this one and if flowed well. Good job =o) |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
I TO AM GLAD THIS GIRL ISNT ALONE N E MORE NO ONE DESERVES TO ME ALONE AND I KNOW I GET ALL DEPRESSED WHEN I AM WELL HEY GOOD POEM "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey everyone, and thanks for your replies!! They mean a lot to me!! Stay cool all you peeps.. ~Carly The grinstone of life can either wear us down or change us, depending on what we're made of. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is a perfect example of what seems to be isn't always what it is. great job. i applaud you...what a read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a very good poem. True, many people, especially teens, feel that they have to "live a lie". I'm that that you aren't "alone" anymore. False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I decided to dig some of these up. Beautiful words, Carly. Very beautiful. Thank you for sharing. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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