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Suteki New Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 5 |
Darkness surrounds me I call out and no one answers A blade cuts through my heart, through my soul So this is what it feels to be truly alone "It is all your fault." I never should've trusted anyone I should've realized that I would just be hurt again Maybe I was never meant to be born Yes, my whole life was one big mistake One action and all will be done No more people to care about No more being hurt time and time again Life will resume as if I never was there But here are still a few whom I can rely on And even though I've let my defenses down so many times I'm not letting that happen again I'm not going to be hurt anymore Too many times have I let that happen And each and every time, I've been put down once again I'm not going to let anyone too close For then I might start caring again [This message has been edited by Suteki (edited 10-23-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Suteki! We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us! This is a very dark and emotional first post, you've expressed your thoughts well in this piece. I assume the "blade" is figurative in the first verse, as in the end, you are somewhat positive, though pensive. I do hope I interpreted correctly and that you are doing OK. Please note that we do have guidelines which we enforce regarding poetry depicting suicide, so should any future poem raise cause for concern in that regard, we will let you know. We care a great deal about the health and well-being of all our members, and we are pleased to include you in this grouping. I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message) Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 10-23-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey there! Welcome to Passions!! I hope you get a kick outta reding all this great work from very talented people. You fit right in! This was great! So dark....I've been there...I loved the ending...well happy writing... ~Carly The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions I hope to see more poems from you and also your replies. This was a great first post, it's very expressive. Well done  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to passions........i hope you are ok and everything is good with you. This poem is very dark and yep.....very suicidal. I hope you don't even go anywhere near that road. Stay cool ya hear? Keep posting...let us know how you are.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey!! Welcome to passions!! I know you'll love it here =o) Great entrance into passions. I've been where your poem describes as well as felt everything. As a matter of fact i'm going through the same type of thing now. If you ever need n e 1 to talk to just e-mail me =o) I loved the poem..great job! I cant wait to see more!! Welcome!! |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Welcome to Passions!You'll like it here most people do.Anyway great first poem keep up the great work. Lauren |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice to see a new face, great dark poem here, hope to read more jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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