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Outside the Box |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
not sure about this one.....but i'll post it none the less.......writers block is horrible!!! i exist outside the box watching you living within believing I was in the right now i know you're not right wasting your life within the confines of inadequate times of destilation and confusion filled with endless apathy i see your error but not mine here's the key i found while wandering so i posess the knowledge to set you free because i have the truth to release you from your shackles though i never would have found it If i hadn't lived outside the box There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. Wow. This was really terrific. You've got an amazing gift...well, happy writing... ~Carly The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
well all i can say is i TOTALLY relate to this poem, i mean, livin outside the social ring of people like i do (im an outcast) i see everything that goes on and i learn from it all, i hope i do anyway, and it all ends up helpin me live happier, eventhough im not with te "in" crowd anyway i love this poem for the soul reason that i can totally relate and it expressed feelings i never knew i had till i read it there are probably other reasons but im blinded by the first one...maybe ill get back to ya hehe always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :) |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
id say your on the way to diminishing your writer's block, this was a pretty good poem jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good job, i liked this. screw the box  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Hoppy! Very thought-provoking and well executed ... there's many people who go their whole lives living "inside that box", and what a sad existence that must be. Very well expressed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yes, very well done, and even through a block too? I think this really gets an important idea out, good writing! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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