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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Broken Up It seems the first time I talked to you I knew we clicked Everything was going well until you said goodbye I wanted to be with you, but work got in the way You had warned me in the beginning, but I just didn't listen I asked you to break up wiht me so that I wouldn't become hurt You said you didn't want to we better wait I hope that your promise is true That you will come back to me sometime later When I found out you got the job My heart broke in two You told me that you cared about me I said the same for you I hope that someday we will be back together Because being broken up is killing my heart "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Chel~Girl its so good to see you back...Especially with an outstanding poem like this...Having a broken heart is the worst until someone else comes and heals the pain... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey Hey Hey, i am back and i am fat...lol great poem and u have the privelige or however u spell it to be the first reply ive mad in a long time and im sorry for that i will reply more often now seeee ya great poem best ive read in a while 2  "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You wrote about this so well, it's well expressed. Great poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Like everybody else said, great job and keep posting  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
hey you expressed a lot of emotion in this...great writing "It's better to burn out then fade away" |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Thank you everyone for the replies. I really take your critism to heart and I know that I still have a lot of work to do in my writing, but since you all liked this one that I typed right off the top of my head I am glad to see that you liked it. I want you all to keep your heads up, and keep writing because its a great thing. Thanx again. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It's nice to see someone who doesn't try to get in the way of the other person's choices in life. You must really like him so much. He should know this when you gave him that chance. I think by not letting him choose between you or the job makes him respect you more. He'll be back. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
great poem...icky situation it will all work outIf you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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