The Poem I Wanted To Write

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Nikkisweet
Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 183
Tx, Dallas

0 posted 2000-10-21 09:04 PM

I want to write you a poem
That would make you cry
Somthing that would make you smile
And want me close by

A poem that had meaning to you
Somthing that touched your heart
And would make you vow
Never to split us apart

I want it to express what
I feel about you
And somthing I can be proud for
Also somthing that'll make you love me even more

Somthing that would let you know
How much I love you
And that I never
Want you to go

I'm having trouble though
And don't know what to say
I've got all thee feelings inside
And they keep building up day by day

So I ask one favor
Help me get these feelings out
And take me by the hand
To a different route

~Guys are like stars,
there are millions
of them, but only
one can make you dreams
come true~

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

1 posted 2000-10-21 09:14 PM

I like this poem, it creatively descibes everything that you want to say. Nice job

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2000-10-21 10:02 PM

You wanna know the truth? I think this is what your wanting to do. I think you just wrote the poem that you're wishing to write. This is one of the sweetest poems I've ever read in passions. keep it up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2000-10-21 11:57 PM

I thought this was great. GOod job

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2000-10-22 12:02 PM

Hey! Another great poem!! You definately express how much you love him in this one. You get your point out loud and clear. Keep em coming!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

5 posted 2000-10-22 01:24 PM

Hey. This was sweet, and I liked the idea. Good work!! Happy writing..

~Carly

The people walking in darkness
have seen a great light;
on those living in the land of the shadow of death
a light has dawned.
~Isaiah 9:1-2

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