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The Binding, the Fight and the Freedom
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The Binding, the Fight and the Freedom |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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She's trapped Frozen in hatred, frozen in tears She's trapped In the midst of depression, lost are her years She's trapped Heart is decaying, steadfast are her fears She's trapped Anger binds to the demons, dark smoke never clears She fights Hold back the hatred, disregard of the tears She fights Set her free from depression, earn back her years She fights Heart slowly growing, weak are her fears She fights Anger torn from the demons, smoke beginning to clear She's free No longer with hatred, released from her tears She's free Flys away from depression, now living her years She's free Heart's fully grown, dissapeared are her fears She's free Long gone are her demons, dark smoke fuly cleared. The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful piece. It's true, if you want it bad enough, NOTHING can keep you from the light. We all have battles to fight with our demons, and this poem reminds us that the fight can be won. Thank you for sharing this with us. PS- love your quote! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Whoa...this poem was sooo good! It shows that you can overcome just about anything! I thought this poem was excellent. Great job!! She's trapped Frozen in hatred, frozen in tears She's trapped In the midst of depression, lost are her years |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
OOooOOO nice poem. Very nice in fact. Umm.. not sure what else to say.. ummm... *is sleepy* well, i'll just leave it at that. Good work. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Child of the Stars! What a great style you've written this in ... your theme flows beautifully throughout, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, this is really good. The repition made it seem more dramatic, I like it. Nicely done "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great and the format rocks. I'm proud of you and it seems as every poem runs along you gain a bit of knowlegde.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thanks everyone for your replies, they are what lead me onward. I love you guys!! Keep bein so cool... ~Carly The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 |
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