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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
-=Impresionism=- Exit myself into the nothing; i slowly await the end of my daze. sing me a song, please my love. write for me, make me art. include me into your impresionism, mold me into you. im sick of perfection thirst your affection overtake me and envolve me in your endless dreams of reality exit myself into the nothing; i sleep in your dreams, and wake in you... -Morouxshi San Note: its been a while since i do a love poem, almost fergot how it felt. the title "impresionism" comes from the idea that if i were to make this poem into a painting that is the style id use, and probably will use kinda saying "here i am, im yours". San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey there. This was really sweet...I loved the word choices. The title was really creative and added to the whole thing. Happy writing.. ~Carly I'm nobody, who are you? Are you nobody too? Then theres a pair of us-dont tell! They'd banish us, you know... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Felipe, i mean San......well this was great. Who's the love poem about OOOooooooooo.....hopefully it's not about Liz *trumphets flare* dun dun DUUUUUNN!!!!!! Anyway it's very creative and i loved it. once again another great piece!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This whole poem gave me a sense that love is an art. I like the connection you show between the two  "i sleep in your dreams, and wake in you..." "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Wow! This kicks some serious butt. I've been watching your work for awhile, you have a VERY unique style - quite refreshing. Excellent excellent work! Keep it up! Beautiful... exit myself into the nothing; i sleep in your dreams, and wake in you... Vreni |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nicely done San! I enjoyed the perspective and language you've used in this. It reads fluidly, and you've expressed your thoughts well. Keep up the great writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Im really glad you people like it, and im even more honored that someone wants to put it in a online magazine. lakewalker got pretty much the esence of the poem, love is an art. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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