Teen Poetry #3 |
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life in a bottle |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
my life is a bottle in which i keep my pains i try to always act happy to overlook life's stains but instead i hide them my feelings, way down inside where noone can see them i try to make my feelings abide i bottle things up in me so everyone will say "he's always so happy, from june to may" i say to myself that bad things dont matter i overlook the bad things they only make life sadder but in truth i dont dont overlook the bad i lock it up inside until i explode and get mad get mad at the world get mad at myself when i let it all out to people, and myself take for example my girlfriend i dont tell her what i think atleast not things that will hurt her and make her heart sink but then it all comes pouring out all my thought that have been locked up inside and she didnt know they existed i couldnt make my feelings abide she wants me to tell her what im thinking at the time but its so hard to do because im supposed to be on her side im supposed to back her up on all that she does right? not go aginst her as sometimes i might she knows that we dont agree on some things anyway but i guess its still hard to say what i need to say no i dont want to break up with her, and she knows that i dont agree with her somethimes and she wants me to tell her what im thinking, the only problem is it doesnt feel right sometimes anyway thats the poem, i kinda got off subject but it just flowed with my thoughts, sorry about that always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :) |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Interesting. I would say be...oh nevermind, I don't know what I would say! But I like this poem, it did seem to express your feeling well. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I thought this poem was awesome! I liked it a lot! I know its hard to get out of the habit of keeping your feelings inside, im the exact same way. But like you i also have someone pulling at me to not be so personal and not close them out of my life. I dont do it on purpose but i dont feel comfortable sharing. I did share and in a way i regretted it but now i have someone i can go to. Explain to your gf your need to keep somethings inside. I'm shur she'll understand. But n e way great job on the poem! |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well this was good to let the thoughts just flow. Most often than not i do the same and my poems sometimes come out all wrong from the general thought. oh well! Anyway the poem didn't do much of that and it was great. ![]() "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've expressed yourself wonderfully CLBinLove, and I can truly relate to these words. You know, I've been writing for about 30 years now, and I started writing because of these very same feelings you've described. I too, found it difficult to speak out in my younger years, and writing was such a release. It allowed those bottled up feelings to pour out onto the paper. Over time I learned that I felt better if I spoke up and calmly gave my opinion ... sometimes others agree, sometimes they don't, but it always makes for interesting conversation. ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey there, great poem. I see what you mean...but I don't think it could've been misinterpreted. Believe it or not, I know how you feel, really. Okay well keep up this writing...hasta luego Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Okay, I know I already responded to this, but I re-read it and couldn't help it. Let me just say that no, you aren't supposed to back your girlfriend up all the time, and you shouldn't always be on her side if there is good reason not to. I'm no expert on this, but I am a girl, and I think your girlfriend understands. Take that into consideration aye? I'll stop now Bel |
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