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LiL'Kay
Junior Member

since 2000-09-09

Posts 21
Canada

0 posted 2000-10-20 12:42 PM

HEY YA'LL
im back!
heres a poem you can read for your enjoyment
so enjoy

~`So Far Yet So Close`~

Far away I feel your sorrow
The thoughts pass through me
Time in and time out

Far away I see your pain
Thrashing through my body
Each hit so bitter so cold

Far away I try to be
Walking with you through your pain
Giving you power each step

Far away I dry your tears
To comfort you when needed
To hug u when wanted

Far away I give you space
To clear your head
To rest your mind

Far away I sit and lissen
To what u must say
And exspress

Far away I know your hurt
Love does hurt
But friendship sha'll triumph

Because as far away as I am
Im still gonna be with you
Through the rough times
Through the smooth time.

LiL'Kay

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2000-10-20 02:10 AM

"Kay" is my nickname

I enjoyed this, it's a great way of describing being there for someone.

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses
over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey.""
Laurie Lee

Kathleen

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

2 posted 2000-10-20 10:19 AM

I really liked this...Its always good to know that you have someone their for you or being their for someone...

Do you mind if I copy this one out???

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2000-10-20 11:06 AM

I liked this poem a lot =o) You showed that people can be there for eachother no matter how close or far they are. Great job!

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-10-20 11:27 AM

I like the repition in this one, it works well. I like this a lot, this part was really good:
"Far away I see your pain
Thrashing through my body
Each hit so bitter so cold"

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2000-10-20 03:58 PM

Great job in decribing on being there for somebody. so sweet.

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

LiL'Kay
Junior Member

since 2000-09-09

Posts 21
Canada

6 posted 2000-10-21 05:50 AM

thanks guyz

and yea you can copy it out Erin

*~!Love Peace and Chicken Grease!~*
LiL'Kay

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2000-10-22 04:19 PM

This is really good. I think this is my favorite one of all the poems you've written. You deserve a standing ovation on this...BRAVO!!!

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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