Teen Poetry #3 |
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i am your soul |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
to dream is to live dreaming is a gift and dreaming is living it gives your soul a lift you can fly above the sky you can breath beneath the sea in your dreams you could even know me i am your soul i speak through our dreams and most of the time you listen well it seems i speak of my ambitions and i recount the day i might make you look at someone a different way i tell you waht i feel because feeling is what i do i guess my sense of feeling is called esp too i live within you i watch you every day and i speak to god for you at the end of your day so be nice -your soul A.K.A. your consience, your dreams, and the person people see if they look into your eyes ok well it sounds kind of corney and i think it is a little odd but i guess its a start right? tell me what you think please! |
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since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey there. I really liked this one. Odd is good, so good...hehe...well, happy writing!! ~Carly I'm nobody, who are you? Are you nobody too? Then theres a pair of us-dont tell! They'd banish us, you know... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is a very good look at what our dreams really are, they can expose our true self to ourself. But anyway, nice job. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well this was nice. I like the concept of this poem and the message is great. Keep it up! ![]() "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
ChicoChicoChico- Nice one ![]() ![]() ![]() Bel |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
I really really like this poem. Nothing else to say, just, it made me feel good. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is actually very good. This is written in a very different way and I love it. keep it up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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