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The Unfiltered Reality of Love
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The Unfiltered Reality of Love |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: it's long...i admit that.....but the thing is that this is a bit of my relationship in a nut shell. The one that ended....I hope the beginning doesn't offend anybody...it's sexual hehe. Anyway..i hope you at least try a bit to read the WHOLE thing. The Unfiltered Reality of Love: Her soft body rubbing against mine. Her moans coming from her mouth. Utter pleasure displayed on her face. She's so beautiful and fragile. How I loved the intimacy. How I loved her body. Everything not only connected physically, But mentally in every way imaginable. She was the one true love. The so called "future wife". The eternity I was destined to have. My everything, my life. Times past, a love holy. My devotion was pure. Yet her mind grew weak, And she couldn't bear me any longer. My tears flowed every night. I wondered if I could fix it. I could change, I knew I could! I tried and tried to please her. More time elapsed and I woed. Would she end it soon? I persisted to piece together the puzzle, Yet parts of it kept getting lost. She ended it a while later. Life as I knew it stopped. My tears created rivers. My sorrow created hell. I tried to cope with it. The fact I was alone killed me. I was in a slow decay, And everyday it got worse. Time went on by my window, And I just layed motionless. Thinking about an eternity not reached. Crying about a girl I loved.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Bad Ass Man! I can totally relate. I know this feeling. When "the one" turns and leaves. You feel empty, like nothing's left. If you don't want to give up, then don't. That's what I'm doing. "The one" left me, and I fell apart. I lost touch with her, regained it, and am currently working on it. She knows how I feel and she still has feelings. Go with your gut instinct but if you want her back, you can get her. Later Keoni |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Oh come one, this wasn't too long. I think it's a great length to get out what you wanted to say. This poem gave me a lot of different feelings as it went on, it played with my emotions. Does she know how much you miss her? Well, this is a really well done poem! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Dopey~ I thought that this poem was good...You showed us some of your feelings that we have never seen before...On love...It sucks to lose that one person you care about more then anything...But you ever heard the saying "Getting you heart broken is only a practice to make sure your heart can take it"...Something along those lines...Close but not exact...Just remember its a consequence of life that we have to live by...Thanks for sharing this one... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i have told you how much i love your new writting? yeah you know. dude, youre doing fine. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Dopey this is great, but it's so sad. It's so cool that you can express your feelings like that though, a lot of guys I know can't...or chose not to. I'm sorry this happened  but great poem.  Bel |
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