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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
I was once in love But she shoot that dove Left it lying on the floor with a busted heart All I do is cry I just want to die I can’t take any more, when does the healing start? There’s no love for me It’s beauty I can’t see Blinded by loss and hate, I cannot be whole I try to experience joy But all happiness I destroy It’s not my fate to have this blackened soul So what ever can I do? I’m reaching out to you Tell me how to ease this pain and make it go away Is their hope for me? Help set this torment free Show me how to love again and make me whole some day Love is the law, love under will. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like how this one's written. It's a really good poem, great job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice poem, and all I can say is that it just takes time |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wow, great job...I can't say you will ever be fully whole again, memories will always last, but it's up to you to get out there and make some better ones. Happy writing.. ~Carly I'm nobody, who are you? Are you nobody too? Then theres a pair of us-dont tell! They'd banish us, you know... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well yes it does take time and i hope your heart is fully mending soon.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
Thank you all, I'm glad you liked this one. Love is the law, love under will. |
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