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Child of the Stars
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0 posted 2000-10-18 08:52 PM


There goes that meek little child
Her innocence has been defiled
Soar into the skies
And escape from the lies
With mad laughter, he's always so wild.

Her beauty: unable to measure
Her purity: a stolen treasure
Long live her dark fear
Of Dad's vodka and beer
Drunk for a wisp of sick pleasure.



I'm nobody, who are you?
Are you nobody too?
Then theres a pair of us-dont tell!
They'd banish us, you know...

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1 posted 2000-10-18 09:08 PM


OMG this is so sad......cutie pie you always seem to write about some father figure doing something to his daughter. Is there anything wrong sweety? I would just hate to see this be a personal situation. The poem is amazing and it's great, but tragic....very tragic.
Hope you're ok.....get back to me on this ASAP!



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Child of the Stars
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2 posted 2000-10-18 09:11 PM



  Oh don't worry bout me. All this stuff is based on something that happened and is happening to someone very close to me...I'm perfectly fine. Thanks for caring man....means bunchies to me...

   ~Carly


I'm nobody, who are you?
Are you nobody too?
Then theres a pair of us-dont tell!
They'd banish us, you know...

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2000-10-19 06:26 AM


This is a tragic circumstance you have so painfully described Child of the Stars. Your expression in this is very clear, and you noted above that this is not from personal experience, but rather is happening to someone close to you. If this is correct, I urge you to speak factually regarding this abuse to someone you can trust, ... a parent, a counsellor, a teacher if indeed there is a possibility that someone is being hurt. Please take care ...

Best wishes,
/Kit

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4 posted 2000-10-19 04:08 PM


This poem has power.  I really like how it's written, even though it is of course about a tragic thing.  Well done   

"Her beauty: unable to measure
Her purity: a stolen treasure"
This part just kinda gave me the chills


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5 posted 2000-10-19 06:25 PM



  Thanks you guys.  You rock...I talked to someone about what has been happening and it is being taken care of...I just hope I'm not too late in assisting them...Heh, gave me the chills too Lakewalker. The whole thing just makes me sick......

    ~Carly


I'm nobody, who are you?
Are you nobody too?
Then theres a pair of us-dont tell!
They'd banish us, you know...

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6 posted 2002-09-24 09:39 AM


This made me feel so sick. Too close to home. Nonetheless a compelling write, Carlita. Well done.

~AF~

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Kandi
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7 posted 2003-05-27 05:36 PM


I kinda agree with Dopey even though I don't knwo you...I just hope everything is okay for you.
I thought this was so very powerful and emotional. Definitely sad but amazing nonetheless. Amazing.
Kay

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