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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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There goes that meek little child Her innocence has been defiled Soar into the skies And escape from the lies With mad laughter, he's always so wild. Her beauty: unable to measure Her purity: a stolen treasure Long live her dark fear Of Dad's vodka and beer Drunk for a wisp of sick pleasure. I'm nobody, who are you? Are you nobody too? Then theres a pair of us-dont tell! They'd banish us, you know... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OMG this is so sad......cutie pie you always seem to write about some father figure doing something to his daughter. Is there anything wrong sweety? I would just hate to see this be a personal situation. The poem is amazing and it's great, but tragic....very tragic. Hope you're ok.....get back to me on this ASAP!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Oh don't worry bout me. All this stuff is based on something that happened and is happening to someone very close to me...I'm perfectly fine. Thanks for caring man....means bunchies to me... ~Carly I'm nobody, who are you? Are you nobody too? Then theres a pair of us-dont tell! They'd banish us, you know... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is a tragic circumstance you have so painfully described Child of the Stars. Your expression in this is very clear, and you noted above that this is not from personal experience, but rather is happening to someone close to you. If this is correct, I urge you to speak factually regarding this abuse to someone you can trust, ... a parent, a counsellor, a teacher if indeed there is a possibility that someone is being hurt. Please take care ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem has power. I really like how it's written, even though it is of course about a tragic thing. Well done  "Her beauty: unable to measure Her purity: a stolen treasure" This part just kinda gave me the chills "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thanks you guys. You rock...I talked to someone about what has been happening and it is being taken care of...I just hope I'm not too late in assisting them...Heh, gave me the chills too Lakewalker. The whole thing just makes me sick...... ~Carly I'm nobody, who are you? Are you nobody too? Then theres a pair of us-dont tell! They'd banish us, you know... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This made me feel so sick. Too close to home. Nonetheless a compelling write, Carlita. Well done. ~AF~ "No wonder I do not make people comfortable. I am a mirror. I have far too many things to say." - Mouthing the Words |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I kinda agree with Dopey even though I don't knwo you...I just hope everything is okay for you. I thought this was so very powerful and emotional. Definitely sad but amazing nonetheless. Amazing. Kay The day you were born, you were born free |
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