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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia 
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Angel < !signature-->The white gown drops It falls to the ground A single tear falls A cry with no sound. She folds her legs And slides to the floor This poor little Angel Can't take it no more. Her tiny warm hands Cover her face Her deep brown eyes sparkle And stare into space. Her tiny white body Trembles with fear Her golden curls wet From that one little tear. She tucks her hair gently Behind her cute ears In the distance A pale white figure appears. The figure, her fairy Comes singing her song She takes the Angel's hand And leads her back where she belongs. * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* [This message has been edited by luvnkris (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I am really loving this. You were able to clearly deasribe events in this poem. Awesome!!! "A single tear falls A cry with no sound." "The figure, her fairy Comes singing her song She takes the Angel's hand And leads her back where she belongs." I love these lines....Keep writing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I think that this was one of the cutest poems i've ever read. Theres something about this one that i absolutely love! Amazing job!! Keep it up!! "She folds her legs And slides to the floor This poor little Angel Can't take it no more." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This has such a nice ending to it. The poem flowed good and is just all around great  Thanks for sharing this one! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
That was beatiful!!! I loved it!! I absolutely loved the ending! Great job, keep writing!! Luv, ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This one was really cute. I loved it tons. I had the whole angel envisioned in my mind and her crying and then seeing the white figure and kinda smiling a bit and then going back to her home and stuff. It was really nice. good job!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this poem. Imagery in it was good. Ending was cool too. Keoni |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Very nice poem...I'm a sucker for imagery! I love reading a poem with so much imagery! Great poem!!! ~*~SCG~*~ |
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