Teen Poetry #3 |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Theres something you need to know, Theres more to me than I show. This is more than just a crush, It’s been awhile, not a rush. You’ve been there through thick and thin, I want you more than a friend. Maybe I was just too shy, But now I just wonder why. Thoughts have always been of “we”, The two of us, you and me. I just want us together, You and I forever. (if ya ever wanna chat, you can IM me on AOL: sexikitticat -or- Poetic Bliss 82) |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well as always great work girl. love it your a great writer so keep them coming. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well i really liked this poem...but i have no idea what kind of title you should give it...eventually you'll figure out what to call it... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
simple but straight to the point. Looking forward to reading more of your work |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful poem! I'm not very good at titles, but what about "You and I"? "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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