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0 posted 2000-10-13 10:50 AM


What makes me above others,
And you pressed against the ground?
I'm too special for you?
Do you know how ridiculous that sounds?
Your telling me you dont deserve,
Someone to treat you right.
Who loves you for who your are,
Desire's your company day and night,
Whose love for you is pure,
And your love back is the only thing,
She wishes upon a star to endure?
You under estimate yourself boy,
In millions of ways.
If you think this highly of me,
And poorly of you.
How have we stayed friends till this day?
I think you've got me all wrong,
I'm just your ordinary girl.
Your best friend maybe,
But not the queen of the world.
So you have a twisted perception of me,
I dont think we've met.
My name is michele,
The girl who has this invision of you and her,
And better yet.
The Girl who fell in love with you,
For your goofy smile.
Who finds your presence worth while.
I know none of this you believe,
It's bouncing off of you.
But even if you dont believe that this is how i feel,
Just know,
Somewhere in your heart or back of your mind,
That it's nothing but true.



© Copyright 2000 Michele - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-10-13 11:24 AM


wow....very nicely penned i must say....i loved the rhyme. keep up the great work.

salma

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2 posted 2000-10-13 03:30 PM


These are great thoughts!  Did you share this with the person you were writing it to?  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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3 posted 2000-10-13 05:56 PM


Good job..... i like the message and you should just tell the person it's about what you feel.



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4 posted 2000-10-13 08:13 PM


The person needs to read this. It's very good. I hope everything works out for you.
Jenn


"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

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5 posted 2000-10-14 12:02 PM


very good poem.
i think we mostly agree the person should read it...


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

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6 posted 2000-10-14 10:51 AM


This poem is wonderful.  I absoulty looooved it!  I like the way you rymed and it seemed to flow.  
          You're telling me you don't deserve           Somone to treat you right                    Who loves you for who you are                Desires your company day and night

I love it!!!


~Guys are like stars,
there are millions
of them, but only
one can make you dreams
come true~

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7 posted 2000-10-27 02:17 PM


Shugar~
This was amazing!!!Whoever this person is needs to read this...Tell them what you are feeling...Dont let them slip away...Keep up the good work!!!


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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8 posted 2000-10-28 07:37 PM


wow.....this is good, i mean this is really good!!!

One thing though Michele, you might not seem that special to yourself, but it doesn't mean that to someone you're not gonna be everything.  You probably are everything to him...and he's scared of that. Do you get where i'm going at with this?

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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