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Secsyy lil angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 36Portland Oregon, USA |
Why did you hurt me? Why did you lie? Why didn't you tell me? Why did you make me cry? Why did you say you liked me? Why did you pretend to care? Why didn't you mean what you said to me? Why when I need you can't you be there? Why is this all getting to me? Why is the pain burning so deep? Why can't you spend your life with me? Why must I sit in my bed and weep? Why my sweet boy, my love, my joy, Why? ~*Love exists only in the hearts of those who choose to acknowledge its existence...*~ *~To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.~* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem gave me a sense of desperation. So sad , so sad. I've been there....i hope all is well. I liked how the poem was all written in question marks.....good good....the format was great. Keep it up!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I like the way you wrote this...You explained it all in the format of questions...Good one!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow that was great!! I LIKE the style! (I write like that sometimes too) It's got alotta emotion in it. I'm assuming it's about you...well....smile and keep your head up k? Keep writing, hasta luego Bel |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. This was really really great, I loved the way it was written...well keep your head up kay???smile..... ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Why did you have to right such a good poem? I think this is really good, I like the emotion you put into it. Well, I mean, I don't like the actual emotion, I like how you put it in the poem  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Aww...this makes me feel so bad. I've been in this place and i feel your pain. Its a horrible thing and you feel lost and empty inside..or atleast thats how i felt. Great poem but im really sorry (if this is true) that it happened. Keep writing =o) |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
wow this was really really good. i hate it when guys do that, cuz they really suck when they do. why can't they ever be nice without being mean later? great poem Curlz "I feel fine enough I guess considering everything's a mess" Barenaked Ladies |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Great poem Secsyy lil angel, I think many of us have felt like this about someone, and you just described it with a great flow. I just feel bad because I hate seeing sad people around me, so if I can help you in anyway, just contact me. Your friend, Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm afraid i have to agree with Dopey on this. If i could only find the words to make it all better for you, i would. But those words are lost forever. Hope you start feeling better..i do...I'll be here if you need an ear to listen to ya  cheer up a bit will ya, just for our sake, cause our hearts do feel bad for yaI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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