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Sweet Surrender |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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I'm scared and alone Tired of being strong I long to let go Just for tonight I want some time To let it all finally sink in deep, to brand my fragile yet strong mind I want to surrender my stubborn soul And show raw emotion Without fearing to lose everything God, why is my heart afraid to sing to him When he's made it perfectly clear That he will never use what I say Against me nor ever leave me in this cold cruel world How much longer Do I need to keep up this brick wall Surrounding my soul Blocking all possible emotions That should be taking their toll Yet instead I no longer allow myself to cry But I'm afraid I'm going crazy With these nerves of steel I gave up my heart under my own free will To another human being Someone whose soul is rare and true But I'm lost, I no longer know what to do I get deeper and deeper letting time take its toll Is this truly love? These emotions, these needs Wanting to break down just for once To want to surrender to them Showing them that sometimes it's hard being strong And that you're just like them A human being.. Reaching out Searching, asking and longing for real love… "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WoooW...I dont think any other words besides wooooow are coming to my head. That was an amazing amazing amazing poem!!! I liked it a lot!!!!! |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wonderful writing....i've never seen something so complicated yet utterly true. congrats on such a wonderful piece. salma |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I have to tell you that this poem seems like it really got your feelings out well. It's like you've taken some of the doubts out of your mind and placed them so well into a poem. I like this a lot! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well i thought the poem, like everybody else said, was wonderful. Great job in expressing your thoughts onto the poem.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Each poem of your that I've read shows so much pain in them. Stay strong girl, that's actually whats still keeping you sane right now. Stay strong I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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