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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2000-10-13 09:40 AM


I'm scared and alone
Tired of being strong
I long to let go
Just for tonight
I want some time
To let it all finally sink in deep, to brand my fragile yet strong  mind
I want to surrender my stubborn soul
And show raw emotion
Without fearing to lose everything
God, why is my heart afraid to sing to him
When he's made it perfectly clear
That he will never use what I say
Against me nor ever leave me in this cold cruel world
How much longer
Do I need to keep up this brick wall
Surrounding my soul
Blocking all possible emotions
That should be taking their toll
Yet instead I no longer allow  myself to cry
But I'm afraid I'm going crazy
With these nerves of steel
I gave up my heart under my own free will
To another human being
Someone whose soul is rare and true
But I'm lost, I no longer know what to do
I get deeper and deeper letting time take its toll
Is this truly love?
These emotions, these needs
Wanting to break down just for once
To want to surrender to  them
Showing them that sometimes it's hard being strong
And that you're just like them
A human being..
Reaching out
Searching, asking and longing for real loveā€¦



"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~

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1 posted 2000-10-13 10:28 AM


WoooW...I dont think any other words besides wooooow are coming to my head. That was an amazing amazing amazing poem!!! I liked it a lot!!!!!
Salooma
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2 posted 2000-10-13 11:28 AM


wonderful writing....i've never seen something so complicated yet utterly true.
congrats on such a wonderful piece.

salma

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3 posted 2000-10-13 03:36 PM


I have to tell you that this poem seems like it really got your feelings out well.  It's like you've taken some of the doubts out of  your mind and placed them so well into a poem.  I like this a lot!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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4 posted 2000-10-13 05:57 PM


Well i thought the poem, like everybody else said, was wonderful. Great job in expressing your thoughts onto the poem.


"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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5 posted 2000-10-30 08:49 PM


Each poem of your that I've read shows so much pain in them.  Stay strong girl, that's actually whats still keeping you sane right now.  Stay strong

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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