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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia 
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Everything with You Everytime you shed a tear I’m shedding a thousand more And everytime your smile turns to a frown Mine is already upside down Everytime your heart beats fast Mines already faster And everytime you go say goodbye I’m waiting to meet again For everyone and everytime With everything you do I’m always there inside of you And I’m doing all of it with you * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Awww it sounds like your totally devoted to whoever you wrote this poem about. Great poem! I thought it was very sweet =o) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You have some lovely thoughts in this piece Luvnkris ... it really emphasized the closeness, almost twinship that two can share. Nicely composed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
nice dude, i liked this a lot. Great job and i hope to see you post up more.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Sounds like you're really close to this person, I like the poem "Everytime you shed a tear I’m shedding a thousand more" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very good work. It showed how much you are intertwined with this person. I know everyone else said that, but it's true! Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... hedeservesbetter@hotmail.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
what a lucky guy....you have written with such feeling and sweetness i just can't describe it. i wi sh someone would write somethinglike that for me...not in a million years....thanks for sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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