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For All the World To See |
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FeMaLe SeNzAsiaN Junior Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 20 |
If I. . . If I took all the stars from heaven, and placed them in your hands If I turned all the clouds to rainbows, and all the stone to sand If I lifted all the darkness, and cast the night away And turned all the rain to sunshine, so that you may find your way Would you open up your eyes to me, To see me standing here alone? And give me just another chance After the hundreds that I've blown? If I lifted up the world for you, carrying the deserts and the seas And handed it all to you, so that you may have it as you please If I whisked away the heavens, and all the angels high above If I brought all that you imagine, and everything you could dream of Would you open up your heart to me And find me waiting there within? So that if you should fall from grace someday I'll help you reach the sky again? If my heart lay in a thousand pieces, shattered before you on the floor And if I shed bitter tears of loneliness until I could cry no more If I gave you every moment, every bit of strength that I had left If I sacrificed it all for you, until my final breath Would you open up your soul to me, And love me for who I truly am So that I may stop this struggle And give you only what I can If I kissed away your heartache, and I hugged away your pain If I put my faith and trust in you, so that we can love again If I am there to warm you, as the nights grow long and colder If I am there to love you as the two of us grow older Would you open up your arms, And tell me we were meant to be And hold me tightly day and night, For all the world to see? ~Dedicated with all my love to my angel Krayzee D, baby I still love you and I am yours eternally~ |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Woooow, and when I say woooow, I really mean woooow, this poem was so so so so SO great, another poem that's going to my top 10. I loved it, I loved it, it's so awesome. This poem was so sweet, I hope that you give it to him, it's really amazing.  This is a 5 smiles poem.I really loved this poem and I hope that everything goes fine with him, I really hope so. Your friend, Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very amazing poem! You are a wonderful writer, and I respect you for it. Isn't love the coolest? It's so inspiring....be real. *~Meredith`* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Sounds like someone is really special...This was beautiful and I hope that you share it with who its for... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
all i can say is... WOW! this poem is awesome! one of the best ones i have read on the forum!!! your emotion was so strong i could feel it as i read it that is the way it should be! keep it up! ~*Pixie*~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Whoa that was an AMAZING poem! It had so much expression and heart in it. Every line i read i grew to understand more and more how much of your heart you put into this poem. This definately deserves to go to the person it was written for. Its too good to have the words not read by the eyes of who its truely meant to be seen by. Great job!! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked how this was written. You can tell the seriousness behind it, your words sound absolutly sincere. It's very very very well done in my opinion "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well apparently everybody liked this poem. I, on the other hand didn't! Haha no im playin...... i thought the poem rocked. Nice work and i look forward to more!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This is awesome... Such a great write you've shared... It's a keeper in my library... Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i cant believe i missed this, it was absolutely incredible, keep up the great work, i cant wait until i read more, hurry! jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wow. So sweet...can't believe I missed it too!! Happy writing... ~Carly I'm nobody, who are you? Are you nobody too? Then theres a pair of us-dont tell! They'd banish us, you know... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
If you look thru all your other poems, I've already said that you are an amazing writer. And that you are one of my favorites. I've evenn tried bumping all your other oems up, but for some reason some of these guys keep missing it. And to tell you the truth, I think they are missing a lot You deserve to get what you want. I hope all things work out right I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
This is the first poem of yours I've read and I just want to personally thank acire for pointing this poem out to me b/c it is one of the best I've read at passions! I can't say enough about this poem, it's just so incredibly beautiful ~ thank you so much for writing and posting it ~Kristin~ ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~When it comes to me, you have to stretch your definition of normal a little bit.~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I'm going to have to echo the above replies in saying that this is a beautiful poem. You have painted some beautiful pictures with your words. I hope that you give this to the person you wrote it for, because I'm sure that they would melt as soon as they read it! Keep up the great work! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
This was a great poem, it was well written and i certainly enjoyed it. I hope you continue to write! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
thank you for sharing this poem. You are truely talented. This was a great read. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
oh wow! I cant believed i missed it either. This is soo one of my favorites. I love your work. KEep it up! ~!*DQ*!~ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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