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Too Soon For Good-Bye
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Too Soon For Good-Bye |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA 
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Too Soon For Good-Bye We met too soon We started too fast Being with you Was pulling me from my last At first it was difficult Then it was great I knew we were meant to be It must have been fate You were so wonderful You made me glad Every time we were separated I was so sad I loved being with you I thought I knew why I thought it was because You'd never make me cry You'd never hurt me You'd never break my heart Just like me You hated being apart But I was wrong We weren't a pair We were falling apart And you didn't care Something happened to you You really changed Everything about you Seemed to be rearranged You stole my heart And threw it on the floor But with each of these cruel things I only seemed to love you more You were moving on Against my will I wanted to hate you But I loved you still How can you leave? Can't you see my cry? Please don't go It's too soon for good-bye ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Did you ever hear the quote "You dont know what you have until its gone?".Well i think that your poem expresses that quote to its fullest. It was very sad but it was definately a reminder not to take for granted what we love and to enjoy every waking moment of it. Thanks for sharing! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This sounds like it came straight from your heart. I like it a lot, it's very expressive  |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Ok, this time you're really writting about my life. I know the exact feelings about this, I wrote two poems about a girl that makes me feel this way, and the most weird thing is what you say in the end... "But with each of these cruel things I only seemed to love you more You were moving on Against my will I wanted to hate you But I loved you still How can you leave? Can't you see my cry?" What can I say, great poem, but I'm sad you're going through this.... the only advice I can give you is move on, it's really hard, but move on. Bye, your friend, Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem and i hope to see you post more up!! Wah00!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
The last poem of your that i read "Only in my Dreams" made me feel like my heart just dropped on the floor. Now, this poem makes me feel like it just stopped beating. You write such sweet poems with such emotions in them. This is a good example of "pouring your heart out". Everytime I see you posting a new one, I make sure I read them. Keep it up and please keep your head up "You stole my heart And threw it on the floor But with each of these cruel things I only seemed to love you more You were moving on Against my will I wanted to hate you But I loved you still How can you leave? Can't you see my cry? Please don't go It's too soon for good-bye" These lines are simply marvelous I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
thanx y'all! acire: thanx, I'm trying to keep my head up, I just tell myself that tomorrow is another day, and that I don't have time to dwell on all the things gone wrong in my life. ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
i really loved this one, it reminds me of something i went thru a couple of weeks ago, but i moved on fast, but hey, i was orinigally planning on dumping the guy for the guy im currently with....i guess you might not know it now...but all tings happen for a reason If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I do not understand how some people don't read your poem. so ~*bump*~ straight up to the front  Your writing is full of emotion and passion. the otehrs should learn to appreciate that. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
ok, i cant add anything but a few words considering everything has been conveyed already. uhm, i thought it was very emotional and expressed feelings well, cant say much more than the ol' cliche words of keep your head up! jeremy r |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Look to the future...There are better things waiting for you out there...More guys that will be better...Dont live in the past...Thats what you have to keep memories...Look to whats coming to you... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
thanx acire, thats soo nice!! and thanx ERIN for the grat advice!! and everyone else for replying, means alot to me!! Much luv, Priscilla ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This poem is very sweet, I hope things improve for you. Keeep up the good work! Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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