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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

0 posted 2000-10-05 02:39 PM

I Lost Me:

Why admit
If admitting lies?
Why bother to run
When it's better to fly?

Hurling facinations,
Sentimental sleep.
Deadly computations,
Transcendental leap.

Canting what I wish
Is doing what's untrue.
The rabbits foot and clover
Have become all of you.

Trapped within machines of man.
Lost inside unknown love.
Wrapped around a fateful plan.
It seems so clear from up above.

Unwanted distance
Liquidated heart.
Guilty difference,
Rusting dart.

Excruciating taunt,
Shadowed me.
All I really want
Is to fully be.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

shadydaze
Member

since 2000-10-02

Posts 85

1 posted 2000-10-05 02:43 PM

excellent poem, great flow. it's like subliminal, speaking directly to that hidden being that understands. good work.
-shady-

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2000-10-05 04:13 PM

I really like the ending of this one Dopey, these to lines (obviously along with the rest of the poem) are awesome.

All I really want
Is to fully be.

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

3 posted 2000-10-05 07:10 PM

I much enjoyed this one! You did well with your words of expression! Keep it up...
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Everyone hears what you say. Friends listen to what you say. Best friends listen to what you don't say.~*~

darkstar
Member

since 2000-08-09

Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA

4 posted 2000-10-05 10:02 PM

Cool poem...I really liked it.

Dark Star

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

5 posted 2000-10-05 10:09 PM

Tremendous. This poem just felt true to me, ya know? You never cease to amaze me.

*~Meredith~*

I'll just keep on laughing,
Hiding the tears in my eyes...
*Oleander

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2000-10-06 02:00 PM

Im happy you all liked it. I like the title of this piece because it's like...... you can view it in 2 ways.
- I (meaning me) Lost Me (me meaning myself)..... so yea it's like me losing myself.

the other is:

- I (meaning some sort of BEING in itself) Lost Me (me symbolizing another BEING in itself). So it's like......two different synonymous BEINGS have lost each other.

Ok so yea i liked it haha bye

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

7 posted 2000-10-06 05:26 PM

Cool poem. Rather deep, and the fact that you show so much interest in the title is great... you should always love your own work!
Jenn

"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

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