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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people 
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I lied I lied today I lied to you today I lied to you today about you I lied to you today about how I feel for you I lied to you today to hide my thoughts I lied to you today I lied today I lied |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey this was pretty cool. Neato format!! Good job!! ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine. Better days are |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Damn Lakewalker you are one big liar!!!LOL Anyways I liked the format...But I didnt like how it sounded...To many "I lied"...But thats just my opinion!!!Keep up the good work buddy!!! It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I hate this poem....actually, I lied  . Very innovative my friend. This is the first time I've seen this format. Really god, not only that, the poem itself is good too. keep it upI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
great use of repetition..loved it I am buried up to my neck in Contradictionary flies I take pride as the kind of illiterature I'm very ape and very nice -Kurt Cobain |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Thank you for the replies |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
hehe.....this one is WAY COOL!!!! luv to read your work!! luvz, VS All of my life Where have you been I wonder if I'll Ever see you again ~*~*~Lenny Kravitz-Again~*~*~ |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
I love this poem! your work is so great i love the format it is really different! very creative! keep up the great work and i am looking forward to seeing more ~*Pixie*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
VS and Pixie, thanks! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
uhhhh.....this poem was interesting haha. Yea but all in all it was pretty cool. The format was interesting....lie lie lie lie lie thats the main topic....unless you take the word lie and invert it and turn it upsidedown into some sort of deep meaning like....PIE.....and your talking about PIE.... uhhh....no  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Dopey - you're so fun Thanks for the reply. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
I for one much enjoyed this one!! It was repetitve, but that is how it is meant to be in this form. You are truly talented Lakewalker, and I commend you on your fabulous talent. Keep it up!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Thank you for the awesome reply |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'm not going to lie... I didn't really like this poem all that much. It seemed redundant and a bit childish in format. Hope you don't mind me mentioning this. I think the idea behind the poem was alright though. ~Allan Its rather handy being at the top of the food chain...you can sort things out and not get the blame for it. ~~Elizabeth Johnson (anonymousfemale) |
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