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To Mommy...
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To Mommy... |
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~Night_Mist~ Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31Calgary, AB Canada |
To Mommy... I tried very hard Mommy. Really I did! Won't you ever forgive me? I was just a kid. But now I'm grown and understand, that indeed, I was wrong. But your anger Mommy, Can't last that long. Don't you see that I love you so very, very much? In your blindness, Can't you feel? All I really want to show is my kindness, And my love for you. Mommy, don't you hear me cry at night? Don't you knowI'm hurt? I never meant to start this fight. But we can start over Mommy, If only you'll agree. That maybe we have a chance. Who knows, we'll see. Do you miss all the fun things, We used to do? All in all, I want you to know. Even in this pain, I'll never let go... I miss you Mommy! |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
wonderful poem! It definately conveys your true hurt inside! I'm very sorry that you are feeling this pain! I hope things start to look up for ya!  Best of Luck! Losing a parent or the feeling that you've lost a parent is the worst loss in the world! I lost my dad. I hope you and your mom work things out! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~  ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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MysticalAngel Junior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 23 |
Annie... that was wonderful! Really good poem.. keep up the writing and I look forward to hearing from you again in email and remember what i told you in my last email... you don't know how much you love someone until they are gone. keep the faith and maybe things will work out! your friend... carissa ** If something is too good to be true... 9 times out of 10 it is ** |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is really great and i hope to read more of you. we'll anyway i hope if this poem is about you that everything works out for you and if not theres always someone here to help. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
How terribly sad....but how beautifully you express your sorrow. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
This really shows your pain, and desperation...show it to her... I love the lines: "In your blindness, Can't you feel?" that really strikes me... Keep writing! "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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~Night_Mist~ Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 31Calgary, AB Canada |
Hey Everyone: Thanks for writing back. Now I know who I can turn to for help and advice. You guys understand the way I feel inside. Looking forward to reading more of your poems. Thanks again! Luv, ~Night_Mist~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Night Mist~ I know what you are going through...My mom left us about 4 years ago...I still see her but its so strange with her not living here...I dont really get along with her good...I feel as if I am still holding it against her for leaving...But thats just how my mind is working...You expressed yourself really good... It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wonderfully written. Stay strong. Happy writing. ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm hoping that you actually show this poem to your mother. I see the tragedy in your life and its nice to know that you are willing to fix it. This poem should move your mom's heart as it has mine. No matter what, to her, you're still her child I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Holy crap i dont know what to say except you need to show this to your mom if my mom was to see that she would break down in tears and just start caring a lot more me and my mom get in a lot of fights but in all i find a way to get through it and we are both okay after she cools down but hey if this has been going on for a while show her this poem if that doesnt turn her around.....look for a new mom that one doesnt care im dead serious n e mother who wouldnt bust out balling then there nothing...good job "what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger" |
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Fearless_Angel Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 57Calgary, AB Canada |
Hey, hey! Thanks for replying everyone! I'll try to take all of your advice. (So much of it!*hehe*) Anyways, can anyone tell meeh what does the little book icon means? Cause I dont' know and it's different from everyone else's...Thanks! Lotsa Love, Angel (^_~) P.S. In case anyone is confused, I'm Fearless_Angel... and was Night_mist! [This message has been edited by Fearless_Angel (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
if i didnt have a mom i dont think i could live cuz she means so much to me which i think ur mom does to you, overall, a+ jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I Got a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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