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In the end |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA 
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In The End I don’t know what to do I don’t know how to feel Tell me am I dreaming Or is this really real? The damage you’ve done I don’t think you will ever comprehend You’ve broken my heart And I don’t think it will ever mend Band-aides and stitches Will never do All my heart wanted Really was you All the things That you have done Made me feel That you were the one The day I met you I wish did not exist Your elegant charm I wish I could resist Would you catch me If I fall Or am I foolish for thinking You’d even care at all Would you miss me If I was gone? Or carelessly would you carry on? In your heart I don’t belong In the end I know I will have to be strong. ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very good poem sweet...Your emotions are well written and expressed. This is truly a great write...keep writing As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
beautifully done. i enjoyed the rhythm it has. i also know where you're coming from, and you have come to a wise conclusion. well penned. keep it up! Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's hard to deal with a broken heart, but you just have to be strong, as you said. This is a very well-written piece. I love the flow you used!  False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the diffrence. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Sweetstuff~~~This was really good!!!I liked it alot...Seems like you already have your emotions worked out...And you realized that yous werent meant to be...But having a broken heart is one of the worst feelings in the world...I know it is for me...Well keep up the good work...I cant wait to see more!!! *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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