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If I Call |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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If I Call If I open the doors, can you let me in? Trust I won't intrude- but the healing must begin. If I broke them open- communication's gates, would you feel burdoned by my presence or it's wieght? If we never do this, the sun will set for good on the very love by which or friendship stood. If you speak of sunsets or forgive my sudden fall- I'll know what's in your heart someday if I call. Jeremy D. Halstead "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this piece of your work is another great from you. so i just had to vote for it. well keep them coming. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is a good poem. I really liked the rhyme and images that you built up. I like the first verse quite alot. I could definatly use that at the moment.  Good work. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Jer~ although you already read this poem to me, I'm glad that you posted it! It seems that people always have nice things to say about your poems! Keep up the good pelationship wit your words...and since I know what and who this one's about, I hope you're doing better now that you've gotten all that you needed to say off your chest! Besides, Kriseten seems like a great girl!! Love ya. Love Always~*~Jess~*~  ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
Hi! I love this poem. It's very eexpressive and I understand it. Keep writing! Luv ya, Danielle "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." "The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin "Follow your own heart, not others." |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
i must say, this is yet ANOTHER good poem from you, although all ur poems have been good this one is deep, i cant really tell waht its about but i can only guess *shrugs* very good poem im jus too tired to actually say anithing that means anything about it sorry CLB always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :) |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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