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Teen Poetry #3

Why... R/R Please :)

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

0 posted 2000-09-21 05:38 PM

Why did you lie to me,
When all I did was care?
Why did you lie to me,
When the feelings weren’t there?
Why did you lie to me,
And take my heart away?
And who were you to take it,
When you did not plan to stay?

[This message has been edited by Suga_Baby (edited 09-21-2000).]

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

1 posted 2000-09-21 05:46 PM

Hey Girl, you know i always like your writing and i just saw that you posted it like not even 3 minutes ago but i thought i'd reply cuz i love it! hehehehe See ya laterz

Love,
Val

~*Always make time to stop and taste the pop tarts*~

Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

2 posted 2000-09-21 06:01 PM

Suga~~~This was good...I really did like it alot...

This part is what I like best:
And take my heart away?
And who were you to take it,

Keep up the good work!!!

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

3 posted 2000-09-21 07:05 PM

Hey chickie! you know i love it

good work!
~*Justine*~

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

4 posted 2000-09-21 07:29 PM

Oh, I know what it is to have your heart taken by someone who doesn't plan to give you anything in return. It's a harsh feeling. I hope this doesn't apply to you, but if it does, I hope writing it helped your pain.

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the diffrence.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2000-09-22 01:40 PM

I liked this poem a LOT. I think you are a very good poet. I like your simplicity and your styles. I think you are great.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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