Teen Poetry #3 |
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my very first crush...hehehe...old one. |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI ![]() |
Summer Regrets I wish I could have known you more You left when the rain gave you a snore The rain was like my heart inside; Cold and wet unlike my pride. I was too shy to say a word And when I felt I should be heard You had already left that day So there was nothing I could say To bring you back there to the place Where we had met face to face. I wish now that I had said A friendly hello instead Of letting shyness creep over me Bringing fear down to my knees. I spoke, but not right to you I wish so much that I knew What was behind your loving gaze But when you spoke I was a maze Of thoughts going this way and that So on the wooden chair I sat Listening to you speak about Your hometown and life throughout Your own maze inside your head I should have answered back, instead I was overcome with shy And could not even say good-bye. Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Our first crushes are always something we remember and you've described the emotions and events all so well. In some ways it makes me wonder how far a relationship with someone would have gone had I not made a certain decision which resulted in our end. But it's all in our best interest I suppose. Bravo! ![]() In order to be good one must know evil. ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I was reading what Dark Enchantress wrote about always remembering your first crush...Well I am trying to think and I cant remember mine!!!But just think if you didnt keep that inside...Its strange how just maybe this person has a crush on you but is to shy to admit it...I know I am the shy type dealing with that...But anyways good poem...Thanks for sharing it... *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Geez, my first crash broke my rib, not my heart! Oh, “Crush”? Hehe, my bad. Well, crushes are like half-lit sticks of dynamite…if you don’t do anything, you explode, if you do something wrong, you explode, if you do something right, you explode. The moral is, you explode. Anyway, good luck deciphering that… In-wishing-Altoids-had-less-mind-altering-properties THERE IS NO SPOON! Spreading insanity, one post at a time Singing, "If i die before i wake..." |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
My first crush lasted 7 years and my second one lasted about 6....I never got either one...now I'm just a lonely, 20 year old, working stiff. Anywhoo...great dpiction of the ghostly awe of the infamous "crush". Jeremy Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
my first crush...hmmmmmmm!!! let me see...It was sooooo stupid. Wait, no that isn't it..it was my teacher at 2nd grade ![]() Enough with that. I like your rhyming style. This poem really sucks you into it like you are part of the story. Great descriptions of events. Keep it up As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I sneezed 4 times just now. Bless me. Anyway my first crush....i dont remember. who cares anyway. Great poem mamasita! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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