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sorrowfulangel
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 59
Memphis,TN

0 posted 2000-09-20 11:51 PM


The morning she told me about you
all i could do was cry
a mommy at 16
what was she to do?
in love with her boyfriend
her tummy a slight swell
my best friend threw away her childhood
and all i could do was cry

The afternoon you entered this world
I snuck up to the bed
your little hands waving through the air
such a tiny person inspired so much love
and the first time I held you in my arms
I couldn't explain what came over me
baby Brandon, such a darling godson

The night they fell apart
I watched you sleep
your mommy and daddy screaming harsh words
And as we sped away I could hear you crying
It was over that night
In his grief your father turned to me
And although that night was so long ago
I wonder if your mommy will ever forgive me
Please know dear baby,
I'm sorry if I aided in ruining your family



"god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways"

© Copyright 2000 Chelsie - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-09-21 12:55 PM


Ok this is just a guess...But I am thinking that you betrayed your friend...Is that what it is???Sounds like a sticky situation you are in...That is if this is based on reality...Well thank you for sharing...I did enjoy it!!!

*Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit*

Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
2 posted 2000-09-21 03:16 AM


Hey....you seriosly shouldn't take the blame for what happened.  It really seems like they were on their way down anyways.  I'm sure you did what you thought was right and that's all you can do...that's commendable.

Jeremy

Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H.


Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
3 posted 2000-09-22 01:25 PM


This poem was really sad. Damn....but it was good. I don't like to give advice so i won't. But i hope things get better.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


DJLI
Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237
TN, USA
4 posted 2000-10-15 10:52 AM


Darling,

The two of you have been best friends for almost four years now, friendship overcomes everything, and it easy to tell the two of you will be close for a long time.  Friends always forgive eachother, if there frienship was anything to start with.  I love you, my Queen


EVEN ANGELS FALL.

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2000-10-15 12:12 PM


This poem has a strong feeling behind it and it sounds like a tough situation.  I hope everything works out for the best!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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