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Thy Sword |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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Thy Sword If I were to allow my pen to be thy sword, things of what kind might I slay? What man's blood would flow no more- or would his soul just perish that day? Be it not true of valiance by thy pen? Hast not the thy pen only good therein? I ask only to find for it a true a meaning. The power of such sword shant be abused or valiance is theiving. Ahh...I see now of the demon's face. Be he an empty heart, desperate for life, or one of such so crowded by faces of creative emotion that he must release or surely burst... my pen shall make fulfilment of the pain whichever. Jeremy D. Halstead 9-19-00 Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerfully written Jeremy! The pen is indeed mightier than the sword, and we must be cautious with the words we write. Excellent expression!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Traveller New Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 6 |
Damn... Daaammmmmnnnn... Damn... Traveller "Just as I've lived, almost unknown, A life unmarked, obscure and alone, So let me die;" -James Edward Wilson |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Jeremy, Impressive writing, once again. Your word usage and vocabulery are increasingly improving, yet you still complain about how you write. Shutup already!! Thomas A. Plemmons Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Alright dude, mad crazy, holy sh--, props go out to you on this one. I was hanging out with Jeff today so my mind is sort of warped right now. But even so, I am impressed. jason  I'm not concieted...I'm convinced. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
just felt the need to let this one live another day....besides, Jess and Erin haven't replied to it yet....and well....they should...so there!!!! Jeremy Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Please forgive me for not replying to this sooner...I guess I just totally passed it up...You are amazing...I already told you that...But this was really creative...You have such an imagination...Keep it up!!! *Falling in love is when you give someone a piece of your heart, falling out of love is when the piece doesnt fit* |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
No one understands the power of words as well as a writer. You have reminded us of the power our "tools" possess. This is a great piece. Keep it up! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the diffrence. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Elizabethan well done. LIked it.....good message......i agree with traveller. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I couldn't let this go unoticed you know..but here I am! you've been so kind and wonderful replying to my poems boosting the confidence I sooo need after a really really long day and my caffiene buzz dying into oblivion but kudos to you I so love your poem and I so swear to god they are better than mine will ever be.. Kris "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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