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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Days, minutes, seconds fly by i wonder around at the way side the smiles and laughter without a care i see past their lies but do i dare tempted to open blinded eyes but i realize that we live our lies despite i set a mission from now till then right now it starts, right now i begin without a clue where to start or go i can't explain how this will work, i just know so set back and tell me i will fail i've heard it before, though i will prevail darkened is my heart from what i see the lies we live with such zelous glee please take to heart and make it thine look at your watch, you're almost out of time There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very powerful thoughts here hoppy. Well done!  *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this poem was very good and well written. post more up hoppy cuz i dont see you around. This is the first thing i have seen from u.  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"so set back and tell me i will fail i've heard it before, though i will prevail" Nice flow and rhythm in this piece Hoppy! A thought-provoking read, with an "I will prevail" positive attitude ... you've expressed yourself well in this piece. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I missed this one before, and it's great. Just thought it was definitely worthy of a lil nudge to the top.. ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Just would like to once again say that this was great. "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
The word great has already been used, so i'll add that it was really really really good. That's the same as great but only in differen't words Anyway, I like your poem. "tempted to open blinded eyes but i realize that we live our lies" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
hey everyone, wow i had forgotten i'd even written this poem on here Nice to see someone dreadged it up and read it. I haven't been posting much cause i'm having an enourmous writer's block. One of those times when your life seems dead....and with a dead life your writing can be no greater than the silence your living so i've not written in a while. Though i hope i can get back into it soon. I might post some older stuff if asked Happy writing to all There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
One of thebest written poems I've ever read in Passions....I'll rate this the way I rated the other ones that i loved.."This should be Published" -- that's my rating "the smiles and laughter without a care i see past their lies but do i dare tempted to open blinded eyes but i realize that we live our lies" I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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