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Plea for my Romeo
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Plea for my Romeo |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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Romeo, oh Romeo Please cast away these fears Your Juliet is crying so Do brush away her tears Darling, sweet darling Please don't run away You are but a starling So young so you must stay. Dearest, my dearest Please fix your gaze on me For your eyes are clearest When into mine you see Lover, my lover Please hold me close and tight Your lips with mine do cover As we dance into the night. Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Your poems are so good. I loved this one, very romantic and sweet. *shakes his tooshy* Made me wanna dance into the night myself. I loved this, so stop saying your poems suck, cuz they don't. SO HA!!! i loved it and i only say LOVED when i mean it. So good job!! MORE!!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Hello, how are you? Oh, wait, I’m chatting with you right now! Ok, so you’re terrible…ummm, me sorry… Yes, it’s very yummy and tasty, has that fine French wine aftertaste…good job um…deary… Nice reference by the way…well there is nothing more to say than… THERE IS NO SPOON! And cheer up! Spreading insanity, one post at a time Singing, "If i die before i wake..." |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Beautiful words here...I liked the way this read aloud. Very well done!  *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This was great!!!  I really like it...I feel as if I am speechless...(that rarely happens too)...Keep it up!!!~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
you used the characters of Romeo and Juliet beautifully...this an absolutely outstanding poem..i loved it! "'I am the the lizard king I can do anything I can make the earth stop in its tracks I made the blue cars go away |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Child of the Stars! I loved the formatting, the flow, and the rhyme scheme you've used. The repetitive aspects in the first line carry this piece through your sentiments nicely ... really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey thanks everyone!! I really appreciate your replies!!! ~carly Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
OMG! I LOVED THIS! It's so wicked sweet VERY nice! *claps* Keep up the GREAT work |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I hear your plea, kiddo.  Great job on this poem, sorry for the eternally late reply but I'd like to add it to my library, if that's fine with you. So in it goes!  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'm all talk, but I still ALWAYS forget to hit the button!  |
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