Teen Poetry #3 |
besos |
Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
un beso, debajo una cieba, que se convirtio en mucho mas |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A kiss under a cieba that converted into many more Ok so.....i know Cieba is a type of tree. Very nice. But what is the general point of this poem? I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Actually, a better translation might be: A Kiss under a cieba that became so much more. (notice that mucho is singular, and not plural) no particular point, these are just some words that leaked from my pen, onto my notebook at three in the morning the other night. frankly, I'm in a bit of a block. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I thought "besos" meant hugs & kisses???Anyways I must be going crazy...LOL Such a sweet poem though!!!Keep it up Jose... ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked this a lot, keep writing these great poems |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
Pretty nice poem, maxx. So youre in a block huh? Well in your response to dopey dope's response, you mentioned about how those words just flowed from your ink pen. Perhaps you could write a poem solely on how words flow from your inkpen or something along those lines, possibly... |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Jose- Short and sweet, I liked it. Hey, I'm in a "writers" block too. Good luck Hasta Luego Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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