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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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OK so i don't have to keep on typing the #4 on the thingies......let it be known that ALL the work is now from the 4th Wave....me as a 10th grade. So yea.... Reoccuring Desire: I am the nothingness in your pool of cares. I am what your mother dreamed about. Don't run away dear Sally. You're my one and only hope in this world. My heart is frosted away. My life began today. Living with pigeons and chickens. Dying with the spider of fear. Why is this the way I sleep? Tell me Sally my dear. I die; I die twice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
wow, that girl must be (have been) really special to you... great poem!! luvz, VS I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
To clear things up, Sally doesn't exist. Hahaha I just thought the name fit. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Pretty cool poem, I liked it alot. Very interesting style. Keep up the good stuff  Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets tr |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Dopey- Well actually I liked the first stanza, but I really wasn't feeling the rest of it. It really didn't quite fit. I don't mean to be offensive, it's just my opinion. Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Dopey~~~I like!!!That was really good!!! My heart is frosted away. My life began today. You made it sound like it was all true...Keep up the good work!!! ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Oh how sweet you're writing about me!! Sorry couldn't restist(no my name's NOT Sally incase you were wondering  )It's a great poem....keep it up...hasta luegoBel;; Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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