Teen Poetry #3 |
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ice and coconut |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
An icy breeze howls across the frozen north, and i remember the time when we were together. on the sultry carribean shore the time we came through the hurricane, embraced in eachother's arms I remember, as the snow starts to fall. I remember that last coconut we shared on that day, that day i left. recolection reached me, as i bit into that frozen candy bar and its substitute coconut center. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Such an intresting poem...Is this a candy bar you are talking about???Well its a poem and it was pretty good...A different type of poem!!!Keep it up buddy!!! ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Muy bein Jose. Very interesting to say the least....hey...would you mind if I e-mailed you? Okay, hasta luego mi amigo Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Erin~no I'm not talking about a candy bar(although I see why you might thinks so in the 2nd stanza), I guess it's obvious that I haven't been practicing much lately Isabel~I'm glad you enjoyed, feel free to e-mail me, mi direccion electronica es: [email protected] ciao |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
Erin~no I'm not talking about a candy bar(although I see why you might thinks so in the 2nd stanza), I guess it's obvious that I haven't been practicing much lately Isabel~I'm glad you enjoyed, feel free to e-mail me, mi direccion electronica es: [email protected] ciao |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
whether it's about a candy bar or not it is a great poem...it flows beautifully...great images "'I am the the lizard king I can do anything I can make the earth stop in its tracks I made the blue cars go away |
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