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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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*I have never come up with a poem as quick as I came up with this one. This has nothing to do with me it just came to my head when I thought about a friend/ex boyfriend. That I can barely talk to without getting into a fight with. But anyways about the poem. Its ok I know if I took some time, I could make it better but here goes. If anyone can offer some help on to making it better please do so. Enjoy!!! < !signature-->~*Time*~ The time has come for us, to say our final good~byes. So wipe away the tears, and dry your eyes. Time gave us love, but then took it away. And all that is left, is the good~bye you must say. Only time could tell, when the day would come. That turned our lover's melody, into just a friends rhythm. Give it some time, and I promise your heart will heal. But I cannot force myself, to change the way that I feel. ~*Each day is a treasure box from God, just waiting to be opened*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 09-12-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
ERIN- I really liked this! Maybe we just have a thing for quick poems  I like how this seems sweet in a way even though it's about leaving someone...I dunno. Definitely a good poem  |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Lakewalker~~~Thanks for the reply!!!  I dont know how I came up with it so fast...I just thought of the word time and all these thoughts came to my head...I was so suprised I was able to write a poem so quickly...~*Each day is a treasure box from God, just waiting to be opened*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
...sometimes great things just come to you... |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Heya Erin, Time spent isn’t any measure of beauty created. Ouch, that hurt my head… Saying goodbye sucks, been there, done that…Great work though, Laters, --- Spreading insanity, one post at a time “Writing about darkness comes easily for me. I just close my eyes and write what I |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
ERIN- i really liked ur poem. i've lived through heartbreak and am easing my way through it right now. let's just say some people can pick the worst ways to break up with you! i thought ur poem was awesome! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks for all the replies...I really appreciate them!!! ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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HaVoK Junior Member
since 2000-09-06
Posts 31DETROIT, MI |
Now that is what I like to call... OVER-FLOWING with emotion... That's a tight poem... Keep up the good penmanship Erin...hehe |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks for the reply HaVoK!!!I really appreciate it!!!  ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
What a great topic. Time is so simple, yet complex. Good job. I look forward to more poems from you. *Blonde people are normal. Everyone else is just strange. -Ender* |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
heya ERIN!!! great poem!! and fast poems aren't bad at all!! hehe, I'm like a fast writer too!! luvz ya!! Virgin Suïcide!! I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Hey Erin!!! I like this!!! Fast poems can be awesome!!! All poems are awesome!!! How's life treatin' you??? My life sux. Justin won't talk to me/read notes from me/ answer the phone, and I'm sick with a cough. Well, I like this. Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Ender~~~Thanks for the reply...And about your quote I am normal and I am not a blonde...LOL Virgin~~~I dont know how this poem came to me so quick...Thanks for your reply girl!!! Allysa~~~Im doing just peachy...Actually I just lied...I am in so much pain...I had to have all 4 of my wisdom teeth pulled...Why is Justin acting like that towards you??? Anyways thanks for the reply!!! ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
For one that came so easy, it is a magnificent poem. Looking forward to more. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
I,m speechless  For when day turn to night I am still there The fallen angel jytree |
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jytree Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 336omaha ark usa |
I,m speechless  For when day turn to night I am still there The fallen angel jytree |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks for the replies Thomas & jytree!!!I really appreciate them!!! ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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