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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people 
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Not showing life Not seeing hope Not conquering fear Not going to cope I fall to the floor I search inside I suffer endlessly I try to hide |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Ok, I'll be the first to reply to my poem then  ..lol... I just caught another meaning of my poem when I reread it...interesting. I don't know if I've changed my view on one of my own poems before. Neat. Ok, anyway, um, bye |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'll be the 1st person to comment on your poem that's not you. Anyway i thought the poem was great. I just hope you get ok and stuff. It's never ever good to be depressed, but who am I to talk about depression? I'm the worst of them all! haha.... anyway keep it up.....i liked the shortness of the poem. I love short poems.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Lakewalker~~~Its good to see you still posting...Havent seen you in awhile...Good work...I cant wait to see more!!! Ok Dopey said that its not good to be depressed...But what can we do to not get depressed???I would really love to know...Cause then I would try it and maybe I would always be happy!!! ~*Each day is a treasure box from God, just waiting to be opened*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Dopey-Glad you liked it ERIN-Thanks for reading my poems! That's a good point, sometimes things just happen. |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Hmmmm. Short, but to the point, and it's true that sometimes things happen that are depressing and all that. My whole life right now is crashing, lucky me. Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Lis-thanks for the reply, sorry about all of your troubles. Now I think I'll explain my first reply, if you don't mind. If you do mind, stop reading this Ok, anyway, at first I wrote this as a depression poem. I guess that's obvious from your replies and I'm glad you picked up on it But then when I read it after I posted it, I took a more literal approach to it. Like "Not showing life" would mean someone was dead. "Not seeing hope" means I know theyre dead for goodness sakes! "I fall to the floor" means I'm in shock because they're dead. Did anyone read the poem in the second way? Just a thought on the differing interpretaions (is that spelled all wrong?) of poems. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'll be the first person in ages to reply to this.  Wonderful! I think this is the best piece I have read of yours today. I'm putting it into my library, for future reading. It was so short, but very powerful. Your choice of words was excellent. And the theme... Oh and the title!  Great job! ~Allan Its rather handy being at the top of the food chain...you can sort things out and not get the blame for it. ~~Elizabeth Johnson (anonymousfemale) |
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