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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
My sphere of influence Is that of independence Use society at will Use society until True self can be found And patiently I wait While I educate Myself to beleive Myself to conceive I can hold my own ground Oh so soon will I stand And look over this land To know I was right To know I can fight Inch by inch, pound for pound A wise prophet once said "It is he who is led" "Who will forever be lost" "Who will forever be bossed" "May independence be crowned" < !signature--> Lucidity is the answer to all problems [This message has been edited by Lucius Cade (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerful thoughts Lucius Cade! I love the independent and positive attitude you've portrayed in this verse. Indeed, there are leaders and followers, and with this perception ... you will be one of the leaders my friend! A wonderful read!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this was really good you have an awsome attitude towards life and you portrayed it well great work  Love Ya Bunches ~Jen~  The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
*big grin* THIS IS GREAT! especially the last stanza..NO the whole poem is what I believe in too... Keep posting  "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OK i loved the poem about society and self and all. Very great cuz i am so into that sort of stuff. I write about it all the time.....soon enuff you'll see. But anyway id like to ask you a question on a few verses: "Use society at will Use society until True self can be found: OK its like.....you're saying that we can use society to find out true selves? I don't know if that makes much sense to me. I mean the basic point is pretty clear and obvious, its not that difficult to comprehend, yet I don't see how society's conformist grasp on the human mind can make you become your true self. Do you mean like...... in rebelling we find who we truly are? Cuz thats the only possible way that i think the verses make perfect sense. Like......REBELING= INDEPENDENCE= A TRUE YOU.......right? Clear that up for me.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
An interesting and poignant verse! Love your work although I haven't seen much of it around lately! Keep it up my dear friend! < !signature-->Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
hehe, Dopey_Dope. Basically it is saying yes be part of them, yes be a follower but only at will and only until your true self can be found. And thanks to all others who replied. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
So you are saying to join the rat race of society, and be a conformist and a follower until you find your true self? My question is, how is it possible to find your true self if all you are is another strand of black hair on some guys head rather than shedding off onto a white tiled floor where everybody can see you and you have a true identity. Not apart of the HAIR on the man, but the lonely strand of HAIR on the floor. The one and only. The individual. Isn't the a way to find your TRUE SELF....self identity? I just don't see how, in using society, we find who we are. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
this was a nice poem. I also liked the title a lot. I have one question: are you thinking of against something, or someone specifically? Use society at will while I educate to know I can fight |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a great piece! I'm so glad that you cherish independence and that you see society for what it really is. Keep up the great work! < !signature-->If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a diffrent drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however meausred or far away-Throeau [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 09-10-2000).] |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Jose, not someone specifally, but a life style. And patiently I wait While I educate Myself to beleive Myself to conceive I can hold my own ground That means that I am young but patient and someday because of my efforts now I wont have to live the working class lifestyle. Thats basically what its about. And DOPEY! I swear to God if you ask me one more stupid question I am going to flip!!!!! I dont mind critisizm or a few questions but $%@&! Ahem, thanks for replying everyone. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Please do not misinterpret my questions as CRITISIM....I am just probing the poem and trying to find out the true meaning of it all. Stupid questions? Hardly so! These are very valid and intellectual questions that I am asking for the sake of understand YOUR WORK AS A WHOLE better to appreciate it, not to crush it to pieces. I liked the poem, do you not understand? I just didn't understand a verse and you have not clarified what I have been asking yet. So, I see no reason to throw a hissy fit like others do. What is so wrong about intellectually asking questions about a poem? Is that not what we are here for? Is that not why you post up a poem? For people to not only read the poem, but ANALYZE it? Be proud that I have taken the time of my day to ANALYZE your poem to the core, and in turn have enough guts to ask the author a question about the poem. I don't think its very professional of you to condemn me for doing so. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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brendon2k Junior Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 38none |
AMAZING POEM!!!!!!!!!!!by far the best one that you have wrote yet. I loved it. Keep up the great writing! |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
arg, alright, if you put it that way sure. Yes I appreciate you analysing my poem, the only thing I dont like to hear are reasons why you think verses in the poems are wrong. But I gave the explanation behind the verses, and I thank you for your interest in my work. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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