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StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

0 posted 2000-09-03 03:57 PM

            Winding paths
     Flashing red lights
          trap doors
  All leading to confusion
             Frustrations emerge
     Anger dispersed
         Voices telling you
    Taunting you and teasing you
Lost; you've been here
       Like a mouse in a cage
            struggling to find a way out
    your heart is racing faster now
                your legs begin to shake
        You collapse to the ground
Screaming and crying
        No one can hear you...

         ...amidst the maze....
                    ...of your own mind....




~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

HerMelness
Junior Member

since 2000-07-12

Posts 37
Bridgewater, NS, Canada

1 posted 2000-09-03 04:01 PM

This is adorable. I love the simplicity.. great ending as well. =)

HerMelness
Junior Member

since 2000-07-12

Posts 37
Bridgewater, NS, Canada

2 posted 2000-09-03 04:01 PM

This is adorable. I love the simplicity.. great ending as well. =)

-Wherever you go, go with all your heart.-

Jacman
Member

since 2000-06-27

Posts 291
Dwight Il, US

3 posted 2000-09-03 04:36 PM

THis is great Jessica. Sometimes your worst enemy is your own mind.

JASON

Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear...
-Metallica-

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

4 posted 2000-09-03 06:41 PM

Wow that was great! I really don't know what else to say

lol! keep up the good work...hasta luego
Bel

Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

5 posted 2000-09-03 07:53 PM

Thanks for the replies!!

You all make me feel so
loved! hehe

anyways,

~Mel~ thanks hun, glad you liked

~Jason~you are sooo right!! hehe thxs for the kind words! you're a doll

~Bel~ fear not, your words of praise are more than enough!! thanks so much!!

~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2000-09-04 08:29 AM

Powerful writing Jess! I could feel the anxiety coming through in this ... you've captured this well. Great work!

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 09-04-2000).]

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2000-09-04 11:53 AM

I give you 5 out of 5 smiles
simple poem compared to the others you've written, but it still takes the readers imagination to another step.

nice work Pryncess

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

8 posted 2000-09-04 02:37 PM

Jessica~~~You really do amaze me!!!

This is really good...It sounds like to me that you can write about anything...I cant even write a poem...I am having so much trouble...But anyways as always I loved it!!!

Keep up the good work girl!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

9 posted 2000-09-04 02:42 PM

Thanks so much for the replies!!

Kit~That's what I was working for! Glad you liked!

Acire~ my dear friend, I can always count on you for words of praise. thanks so much!

And last but not least, Erin~ Thanks so much hun you're a peach! I feel special knowing that I amaze you! wow what an honor hehe.

~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

10 posted 2000-09-04 05:51 PM

I think you've gone loco....yet still I'm quite impressed.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

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