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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA 
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Well I haven't been here in awhile I just started back in school, so I have very limited time. Well here is my poem hope ya like it. Someone Else's Life He walked into the store And down the aisle that day His conscious and good judgement Had wandered astray He picked up a six pack From off the floor All the warnings He foolishly ignored He walked to the register To make his purchase The clerk sold it to him With little fuss Shame nor guilt He did not feel As he pulled out his ID That wasn't real He walked outside And opened his car door Having no idea What was in store He took a drink And passed it on In less than 2 minutes It was gone They downed these cans One by one Right after they started They seemed to be done What was about to happen He couldn't comprehend The wounds he would create He could not mend They cruised down the highway And past the red light What they were doing Just wasn't right The speeds soared From 90 to 103 Then out of no where Came the tree He couldn't stop He slammed on the brake The turn he needed He couldn't make The car behind Couldn't make it past Into the drunks They quickly crashed On the pavement He painfully lie He heard someone say "This girl's gonna die." She whispered quietly "Now I'll get to see my mommy in heaven." This innocent little girl Was only 7 "Oh, Lord, say She's still alive Please, Dear God, Let her survive What I did I thought it was cool Now I realize I've been a fool I didn't think of anyone Or even myself When I picked up that beer from the shelf Take me instead She is so fragile Please let her Live for a while But because I had To drink and drive This little girl Won't survive" All of this Is what he thought As he saw What his actions brought Because of him And his selfish way This sweet little girl Won't see another day It stabbed at him Like a knife Because he chose to drink Someone else lost their life. ~¤*¤~iF yOu LuV sOmEoNe, PuT ThEiR nAmE iN a CiRcLe, iNsTeAd Of A hEaRt, BcUz HeArTz CaN bReAk, BuT CiRcLeZ gO oN 4eVeR~¤*¤~ |
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HerMelness Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 37Bridgewater, NS, Canada |
This.. is incredible.. how long did it take you to write this? I'm amazed! That's something you'd expect from a very experienced and published poet. I love it. -Wherever you go, go with all your heart.- |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
wow! Like it?!?! I LOVED IT! this is sort of the closure I needed. Make sense or not, I do have a point here. I lost my lifelong friend to drinking and driving almost 7 months ago. The guy who did it survived...he called me to tell me and the rest of his family (my friend's) how very sorry he was. He admitted that he had a problem and that he was getting help. He lost his liscense. But none of the punishment he has received will ever compensate for the loss I and others have endured. I wish so much I could go back and made my friend leave on time like he was supposed to. If he would've left 10 minutes before he did, he would still be here. But no, I wanted him to stay an extra ten minutes because I was having problems with boys...now, I have nothing. A warning to All people who seem to think that a drink or two won't keep them from getting behind the wheel...That "courage in a bottle" takes people's lives and destroys others. Keep writing sweetstuff!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ p.s. sorry about the long reply and babbling~ ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a HuG grows with a kIsS and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
hermelness: it took me about 45 minutes-1 hour to write it. I was writing in the car on the way to ARK. I don't know I just got inspired for some reason. Starpryncess: I am sooo sorry, I haven't actually lost anyone to drinking and driving, so I really don't know how much it hurts, and I don't think I could ever comprehend how much it would hurt until it happens, which i hope it never does. ~¤*¤~iF yOu LuV sOmEoNe, PuT ThEiR nAmE iN a CiRcLe, iNsTeAd Of A hEaRt, BcUz HeArTz CaN bReAk, BuT CiRcLeZ gO oN 4eVeR~¤*¤~ |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
Sweetstuff, this was a really good poem. I lost my great grandpa to a drunk driver. I never even got to know him. This is a poem that you should tell everyone. Great Job! ~Guys are like stars, there are millions of them, but only one can make you dreams come true~ |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow great poem! I lost my best friend a few years ago because of a drunk driver. She was 17 & very frail. She was anorexic & the impact wasn't even that bad. The guy walked away without even a scratch. My dad was also an alcholic, he got help after he lost my mom, me & my brother to divorce. He almost killed a little baby & I think that shook him out of it!  keep writin LOVE ELMO! |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very, very good writing. And also very real. You definately have a lot of talent. Great job! *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
My dad used to drink alot...Then my mom divorced him and me and my sister stayed here with him...He always was and still is really good to us...This was a touching poem...My dad just started drinking heavily again...And it scares me what if one night hes just to drunk to drive home but does anyway...I think when he doesnt come home that something bad happened...I also lost my godfather...He drank himself to death when I was about 10 years old...I can still see the way he looked before he died...His skin was yellow and his eyes (the white part) was gray...I wrote a poem on drunk driving if you wanna check it out...Keep up the good work!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Really well written SweetStuff! What a sadly expressive way to deliver such a poignant message. Too many lives have been lost to this awful situation ... great message, and well written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
thanks all of you for replying, it means a lot to me. ~*~sweetstuff~*~ ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
There are no words to describe how much I love this poem...I personally do not drink but a lot of my friends do and I just want to print this out and shove it in their faces and say "SEE? See what can happen?!?" Grrr...it is such a stupid thing to do. Why do people continue to do it when they KNOW things like that could happen? Anyways, I really like your style and your wording. You are really talented. Keep it up! Thanx for posting this one - maybe someone who reads this will think twice before getting behind the wheel after having a few drinks. Much Love ~K~ ps - thanx for replying to Something Worth Believing In  ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~*When does something that you thought was so right slap you in the face and becom |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
 you're welcome!!!! ~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~ |
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sweetypie5 Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 97MWC,OK,USA |
Hey Cilla!!! Great poem!! It was really really sad and reall7y really deep! Keep writing!!! I live in the present but yearn for the past... yet the future is so very near |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
BRAVO!!! Everyone in here I think owes you a standing ovation. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
wow this poem is good. it hurt to read this sort of thing sometimes, but like this poem a lot. I hope you never knew anyone in this situation. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
wow this poem is good. it hurt to read this sort of thing sometimes, but like this poem a lot. I hope you never knew anyone in this situation. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is so good, very well done, it's an awesome poem. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
thanx for all your replies. ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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