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But a Dream
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But a Dream |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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But a Dream Dancing foolishly about a velvet floor which has not but a seem. There, alone, with that heart of gold that in a dream you've seen. Nimble swaying side to side, to and fro... moves you dare not try. You've dazzled her and brought the stars in that dream last night. Inhibitions lost in nocturnal bliss and replaced with bravery. Valiant love and noble acts of flight are but a dream for me. But to awake and live as a noble knight is fortune I may do. To rise above a bitter heart tonight would thus be dreams made true. Jeremy D. Halstead 8-17-00 "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey babe!! Wow!~! Do you ever write a bad poem? LOL This was great. I especially love the last verse. Keep up the great work..and is it great! hehe ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Very good poem, I enjoyed it a lot  |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Jeremy, Read this one yesterday. Can't say much about it that I didn't already. Once again you've done a great job. Thomas A. Plemmons |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wonderful!! bravo...bravo! salooma |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jeremy~~~you are one of the most talented writers!!!and i admire you that you can write about anything...this is great work...and im not just saying that cuz your my friend...LOL i mean i feel so priviledged to be your friend...just look at this work of yours!!!haha keep up the GOOD work buddy!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Hey my love...long time no see. sorry I was sleeping so hard when you called...I wasn't expecting a call other wise I wouldn't have taken the sleeping pills. Anyways...try me tonight ok? lol once again, I'm very impressed with your words and thoughts. Keep it up my dear! Love Always~*~Jess~*~ ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a HuG grows with a kIsS and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
I wish I could write half as good as you, your an inspiration, once again youve amazed me, great poem! ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., "I will know where I'm headed, cause I'm so tired of the suffering I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection" ~DMX~ "Prayer III" |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
this was a wonderful poem and i cant wait to read more of them!! |
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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
jeremy....it seems you've left me speechless with this poem -smiles-.....you've created such a picture in my mind... "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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Emmaline Junior Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 15 |
Jeremy ~ I really enjoy this poem. You really have an eloquence with words. I look forward to reading more! Good work. ~ Emma |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Nice poem. I really liked reading it. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
great poem. I like reading your stuff. you're very good. Keep it real. max |
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JR Junior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 22morris il |
very good JEremy. good luck with your future poems and I'll be in town on thursday so im stopping by and waking you up. heres a poem like that, i wrote it a while back: dreamer slowly you drift into harmony, living in thoughts,fantasys, wonders. though not real much better than life, there are no mistakes, sadness, or blunders. love runs wild, emotions flow free. dreams are exciting and new worlds of being, drift to your fantasy and follow you mind, just momentarily fall into what your seeing. -JR "two roads diverged in a wood and I... I took the one less traveled by... ...And that has made all of the difference." --Robert Frost |
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