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Jose Marti
Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

0 posted 2000-08-18 11:13 PM

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My love for you,
Flows from a spring
hidden by the undebrush
out in some cave,
deep in the tropical jungle.

From that point it flows forth,
into a fledgling steam,
which becomes a powerful raging river.

The jungle ferns florish around it.
Still hidden from sunlight,
by the think jungle canopy.

Still hidden from sight,
it's rushing sound fills the jungle,
for miles around.

It rushes past
a metropolis
Itself overgrown with vines.

Finally the jungle parts
All bear witness.
My love has made it
out to sea.

jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

1 posted 2000-08-18 11:59 PM

Super interpretation of your love, really creates a good sense of your feelings, I hope to read more!

Love,
,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_.,

"I will know where I'm headed, cause I'm so tired of the suffering
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection"
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

2 posted 2000-08-19 04:02 PM

I love it Jose!!!good work...

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~

Jose Marti
Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

3 posted 2000-08-20 06:38 PM

thanks guys. even though only two of you read my poem, I'm really glad with them. Jermy~ I like your response.
Erin~ my homegirl~ your seal of aproval is important to me.

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-08-20 11:08 PM

Ok, well, I'm honored to be the third to reply to this one. Don't take the lack of responses personally, cause this is a great poem

You were putting some great pictures into my head, thanks for the chance to read this!

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

5 posted 2000-08-21 02:39 AM

jose~~~what can i say???this is my favorite poem by you...so you better keep up this good work

...and i will keep telling you how much i love them!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~

Chel
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

6 posted 2000-08-21 08:06 AM

Jose, great poem, I liked the way it was put together. Keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"True love last forever"

Salooma
Senior Member

since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

7 posted 2000-08-21 09:32 AM

Jose -
Bravo...! I've been gone a few, but struggling to read all these poems...wonderful writing keep them coming!

Salooma

Lovely_Kris
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

8 posted 2000-08-21 04:33 PM

I think this is a great poem and I think you did a great job. Keep up the great work and Hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris

Jose Marti
Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 374
washing DC

9 posted 2000-08-22 03:16 PM

thanks for reading my poem guys. I'm glad you all read and enjoyed it.

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