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The candle faded...
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The candle faded... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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The candle faded... (in memory of B. Pasternak) The morning stared into his face So weak and jaded The candle faded into haze The candle faded Upon his hands, dark stains of ink Transformed in color And blooming early, far from spring The nature hollered Outside the window, in embrace The winds debated The candle faded into haze The candle faded The molten wax froze on his shirt Remaining warm And all was tranquil and inert And all was calm Behind the desk, in common stance So full of wonder His head lied rested on his hands His soul in slumber Where tangled in a single gaze Two fates were braided The candle faded into haze The candle faded And silence crept into the room Quick and eternal Dim shades and shadows of his doom Fell on his journal The sun was rising in its place As if inflated The candle faded into haze The candle faded Check out my poetry here: http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow, this is an amazing poem. Really powerful and touching. Great work!< !signature--> "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespeare [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 06-19-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
OH WOW!!!! that poem is one of the best that i have ever read. its shows so much feeling and emotion. it shows that you really cared about this person. thats really sweet how you even put the picture in with it, i give you props for this poem. |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
LoveBug, THank you for your comments, I'm glad you liked this one! Erin, let me explain this... This poem is dedicated to a famous Russian poet who has passed away some time ago. He has a poem in the same style, except in his the repeating line is "the candle burned..." I love his writing and thus I decided to write a poem dedicated to him... Also, the guy in the photo is me... Thanks for repsonding! Check out my poetry here: http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Great job!! You wrote it so that the reader could really sense what you were feeling. Very strong emotions. I really like the way you write. Thanks for sharing it. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear master, beautifully touching... i'm sure that pasternak would have been honored... sincerely, a sad tomato |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a great piece from you. i only read about three of your poems but this make sme want to read more. great job keep it up. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you everyone! Your replies are very much appreciatted! Thanks! Check out my poetry here: http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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