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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I catch you in yet another lie My trust in you finally dies Shattered by your deceitful ways Not just one but many days They all have led to here and now No longer to you will I bow My heart is not yours to keep You have wounded me too deep I take it back from your reach It's a painful lesson that you teach Your point was beat into me Now I long to be free Like a caged animal pacing about Inside my heart screams and shouts Continuing until I lose my voice I feel I have no other choice There are no tears left for the past I put it behind me looking ahead at last Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Jenn, this is by far my favorite by you  The way you chose to word this verse is amazingly exquisite |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
LW, This is a wonderfully written poem. I am very sorry it had to be written. It is too bad we take so much in the name of love before we are finally ready to admit we have had enough. One can only get walked on for so long before we say no more. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I have no idea how you write so good. My poems seem to need work when I read your poems. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Wow!! I have felt this too!! But love has a stronger grasp on our hearts than we like to admit!! Good write! Thanx!! Click |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
WOW Been there, done that and got the "darn" Tshirt  But I cant ever get to the looking ahead part. Awwwwwww yet love is so damn scary, once it has burned you before. Great Poem!!! Peace DkW |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
A great piece LW. You have captured this perfectly, the building up over time, the turning point, and the new begining, well done! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Excellent piece! These lines are so descriptive: Like a caged animal pacing about Inside my heart screams and shouts Continuing until I lose my voice I have to add that it is an important point you have reached here, and I'm glad you have found the strength to let go of a relationship that seems to be oppressing you. (if it's about you, that is )Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...for me it was an accumulation of the lies and deceit...I feel that love is worth fighting for if both share the battle...but if one chooses to cheat and lie perhaps it truly is time to say goodbye...James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Mmm, what a poem, I too have been here, and its a hard moment to make that final decision. Hurts a lot. You said it so well. Catalinamoon "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh mighty one,..."I put it behind me looking ahead at last". This poem has been felt...it is resting on a shelf in the cave of my heart. You know that I'm on that bench with you,...looking ahead. Be well, gurl. *Peace. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey . . . Thank you my friend. Marina . . . I am sorry it had to be written too. Thanks for the reply and you are right, one can only take so much. Xeonox . . . Don't short change yourself. You write well also. Thanks.  Click . . . Thanks, very true. DKW . . . You must risk to gain my friend. I have that shirt too!! LOL Eagle One . . . Thanks. Just how life is I guess. One door closes and another opens. Lotharingia . . . Just about life. We all need to know when to let go. Thanks!!! James . . . Lying and cheating should never be tolerated. I believe the time has come. Thank you. Catalina . . . Sorry to hear that and yes, it does. But it must be done. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SF . . . Very mighty these days my friend. It is an honor to be resting on that shelf in your heart. I know you're there, I can feel it. Take care. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wow Lone Wolf this was a good one. Describes the hurt, confusion, realisation and the decisions perfectly. It's a hard road to walk but glad you are able to and are you are looking foward not back I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Never look back Jenn....hurt may be gaining on ya'. Good job. Hardrock |
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BrittH26 New Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 9florida |
i loved this pome. i think you have described something everyone has gone through. It was very moving. |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
I see the hurt, the pain In black and white How do you write so well? You seem to loose me in your spell. Your poem gives me much to gain. I will stand by and read your new poems hoping for a new begining an a end to a longing cry. Great poem. LarBear |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Isis . . . Thank you very much. The road only points ahead. The past is past and cannot be changed. Hardrock . . . I won't, thanks. Britt . . . Thanks and welcome to Passions!! I think we all have too. LarBear . . . Thanks so much for the rhyme. You made me smile. Stick around, there will be a new beginning. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
You captured this feeling well. Only until we (you) make that decision to let go of the hurt and lies can we continue to move forward. Nice writing. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
kitkat, It is a familiar feeling. Thank you very much. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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