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moshpit Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143cebu, philippines |
A rugged boy of fifteen--crouching quietly on the spiral steps of a dilapidated orphanage--dreams of a mother existing but yet to be seen. And his eyes are cbitter, exhausted by tears-- unwelcoming windows to a soul unloved for years. And before the clinging leaves,the last of the autumn season, should join the earth, a not-so-feeble promise is made: "With the stars as my witness, I will search for you, Mother. And I will find you, I promise before this winter's over." And the lonely boy--armed with nothing but his sorrow-- trudged through the viscid snow and found no sleep in the shadows. But he trudges on, unmindful of the cold fueled only by his ardent vow and by his dwindling hope. 'Til one stormy evening, he came stumbling upon a church, drained of all his spirit by hunger and by his fruitless search. Exhausted, he fell asleep on the altar's foot, he breathed the last of his breath and dreamed his last dream. And in that dream, at last he met his long-lost unforgotten mother. And in doing so, in that brief instant spent eternity together. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is so terribly sad! What a tragic tale! There are so many unloved children in this world, both with and without parents. It is so awful I cannot bear to think about it. This is an excellent, thought provoking poem, and thanks for writing it!!! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh my, Moshpit,...*sigh*.  This read so softly. Such a somber tale,...but restful at the ending. Wonderfully told. *Peace. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I hate to think of all the forgotten children of this world, this made a tear come to my eye..so very sad, and well written. Im sure this is a reality for so many, just so so sad...... |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This made me sad....I liked how you ended it "And in that dream, at last he met his long-lost unforgotten mother. And in doing so, in that brief instant spent eternity together" Basically a happy ending!!! Very good piece!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Mosh...as an alumus of Oxford Orphanage in Oxford, NC, I can relate to this...we had kids like that. The difference was that our Orphanage was not run down...in fact, it was quite the opposite. But brick and mortar do little to still the anguish within some of the kids. The worst were those who had families...even parents...but they were still there because of "circumstances". Nicely done...you captured it so well. Hardrock |
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