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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
ok this is for all of you who replied to my little story about were i am. i hope you like its something new. This time of year doe's chill My bones and with no one H E R E I'm on my thrown all-alone covered In snow Slowly turning to stone Having only a seat but, nowhere To call my own Home. Reply: some of you might think this is about the winter time and if thats how you grip it great. but for me its about being alone and having a place to go. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Gotcha loud and clear on this one...I wrote a poem similar to this once upon a time...I like how you captured you feelings in this piece...Bravo! Angel< !signature--> Listen to your heart for it knows the way even when you don't. ~*Angel of Darkness*~ [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 07-11-2000).] |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
Bravo JJ! What a sad, cold, lonely piece. I loved the format! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
No bad JJ...little mysticism there. Nice flow, well written...didn't feel wintry at all to me, just the coldness of aloneness. One question: am I wrong, or should "thrown" be "throne"? Nice read jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 07-11-2000).] |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
You amaze me JJ...Hardrock |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
wow, this is an interesting poem! ^_^ thrown, yeah, I picked up on that too, and also in the first line u wrote doe's.. does?? ^_^ well done Jeremiah.. Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Jeremiah, I feel the same way, no place to call home, just the place you are, and its not the right one. Alone is cold, no matter what season. I liked the format and the feeling here. Sandra |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Yet another wonderful piece from you! What an excellent image. made me shudder. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Yep.... got it.  Good piece Jeremiah. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
thank you all for your replies and sorry i have not been around for a while i have got and job and have been trying to get two of my novels and books of poems formated, spellchecked "as you can see i do need it from time to time" and filtered through the good and bad. so i can take them in a few weeks to a publisher. own a personal note i got a job in a library so there hooking me up with publishers. well thanks again and i pray for me please. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
another great one from you that expresses lots in few words...a read much enjoyed |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
You seem to always leave me at a lose for words.....a good lose that is... "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
JJ. There is an old ARMY Saying "Home is where your hat is" I know loneliness is an awful thing. remember, you will always have US. LarBear |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Excellent piece Jeremiah!!! Slowly turning to stone... Alone is so difficult at times...Loved this one!!! |
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