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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
Be my prose, my logic, my sense. Be my literate thought, my voice of reason. Be my happiness with an eye toward the future, my rational contentment. be my poetry rhymed or unrhymed rhythmic or staggering my soul's passion my love affair with the word of venus be my epic creation be my creative muse be my voice of song be my heart's desire be my longing's reason be my soul on fire be my joyous rhapsody be my thoughtless need be my senseless pounding heart be my love's random seed Be my mind, my soul, my heart be my sense, my smile, my ravaged joy be everything you are [This message has been edited by Portia (edited 06-15-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Portia,...this poem to me just seems like a perfect one to hear read aloud. I like it lots. The ending says it all....and such a wonderful thing for the keeper to be holding. ~be everything you are~ *Peace. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
I agree, this really is a great love poem, especially with thtat unexpected twist at the end. While reading it I thought it was about a wish for an unknown person, or the urgent desire for a new lover to be all of those things, but then you show us that you (or whoever it is in the poem) already have found this person who is all of these things to you, and you are sinply thanking them for being what they are. BTW, is it intentional that the beginning is on one line? Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Wow! By the time I got to: be my senseless pounding heart be my love's random seed My heart was pounding along at a faster pace! Liked this one Portia. Thanks! |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
Thank you, everyone. Lotharingia, yes, it was intentional that the first stanza be on one line-- my desire was to display prose, poetry, and music (which of course only amounts to rhymed poetry here) each in a different segment, to display how love consumes the mind, heart, and soul. I am very glad everyone enjoyed it. Thank you. This one meant a lot to me. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
God I'd love to have a person to say this to. "Be every thing you are" Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
 errm. Now that you say it, it's obvious. Sorry I missed that one!Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
Another great poem from you i wish to read more and more. i few points in what a person is are always unclear but that helps them to be them with that little mystery I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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