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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
see meet observe consider approach speak hear coverse share talk ask tell reveal cofide listen trust agree compare plan live decieve lie mistrust hurt apologize reach grasp try understand hope forgive continue believe learn LOVE! Click [This message has been edited by Click (edited 06-15-2000).] |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Too many verbs??? Click |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Absolutely not!!! Not for me.  . This read so well...such a stringy strand of verbacuous writing. (OK,...I made that word up hehe.). So sad though too...where this leads. The LOVE at the end though lifts your heart after reading the part about decieve...etc. Well written. *Peace. |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
These words follow the natural progression of things and the title is perfect. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
No, not too many verbs! Perfect as it is. The sequence of verbs which you relate to love makes the poem really strong and original. And very true, too. Love it! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
when I first looked I said What? then I followed the strand and found myself really enjoying this immensely. I particularly enjoyed the ending. forgive continue believe learn LOVE! it shows the depth of true love in forgiveness, continuing upon love's adventure, believing in it, learning more of it's depth, and finally result, in a love more than first started. this is what it seems to me. if not that's ok, it is to me. just thank you for it. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is another good piece of your work i hope to read many more of your poems. keep up your views and live your life to find in the end that LOVE. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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